Never Before

'Only you need to stay...'

 

Never Before

 

I feel to reveal as upstart

While you touch; I never shy

 

I feel to recede as coward

While you leave; I never cry

 

I feel to touch as mountain

While you are without the attire

 

I feel to write as writer

While I enter your unspoken road

 

I feel to walk alone

While you stop walking, in that

Dark alley, to several footprints!

I had no regret for falsely

Thinking I am the one who

Invented you first…

 

Only, I feel to smile as King

If you say you’re only mine!

Reviews

[Catastrophe]

great title for this poem, i enjoyed reading it, beautiful..
i really love the first stanza, great job!! :):)

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

beautifully stated.

[Ms Jessica Renee]

Beautifully written my dear. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Just Manoosh]

I feel to write as writer
While I enter your unspoken road

Beautifully said my friend.

Mx

[[untitled]]

A beautiful and enchanting piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing.

[RAWR!]

raja yaar,
this was a nice love poem ^^
thank you for sharing.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A great ode to the one you adore...I like the use of repetition - reminds of my 'We..' series I just posted. Thank you. Quite nice reading.
Light,
Siddartha

[Fran Marie]

a lovely piece deeply espressed and well penned~Fran Marie

[Vanessa]

I really, really loved the format of this, especially the line that reads:
"I feel to recede as coward
While you leave; I never cry"

And as some sort of 'constructive critique', I'd have to ask whether or not you meant to write the fifth line starting with "I feel to walk alone.." I am wondering if you mean to say that you feel as in touch or feel as in 'feel like'(want to).
That's my only concern.

Thank you for sharing and requesting my analysis[or my reading it; I seem to give an analysis either way :I]

//Vanessa Alyse

[Ray Hamilton]

Nice write enjoyed
Ray { Not a Poet }