City of Loneliness - Part I

'For those Who are Lost in City '

 

City of Loneliness

 

Part I

 

Only they start beholding me as an

Unknown face

 

Only they behave like I

Will steal their wealth, but I never will.

Alas! They think I am the intruder

In a lonely city…

 

Myriad, lots have come n’ melt

Mystery, lots get lost n’ rise

Memory, lot of time flies n’ lands

 

I, me, myself

They, them, themselves

 

I shoulder the indescribable pain

Of loneliness in the midst of

Gathering, like a perfect child

 

I look forward to talk and smile

With someone I never knew, but

With someone I ever feel

‘I will be alone…forever’!

Reviews

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

fantastic piece

[April Child]

You capture it well. It is almost a feeling of being invisible in the midst of so many people which is almost preferable to looks of indifference. Loneliness is a cruel affliction. Nice poem.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I can truly empathize with this feeling. I have lived in places where I felt these exact feelings. Nicely expressed. I might consider using the word 'knew' instead of 'know' in the last stanza - it would make more sense that way. Otherwise, a great write. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Ray Hamilton]

I enjoyed, well penned Thanks Ray { Not a Poet }

[Leah Elisabeth]

This was quite interesting. You managed to not only write about loneliness, but to allow your words to convey a mood of loneliness. Keep writing.

[Vanessa]

I love the old English tone that this gives off.

[Phil Sanders]

Marvellous write .....

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Loneliness is most painfully felt, when surrounded by people who look right through you.

[The Autumn Faerie]

Another well wrought piece, and I shall expect nothing less from here on out.

I think my favorite part in this piece is the ending, as I can certainly relate to it.
I believe an ending can make or break a piece, and this ending certainly made it!

Excellent work!