Our Rain (love's irony)

Tens 'n Eights

"Our Rain"

It’s raining here now, quite charming - somehow,

rain gently reminds me of You.

Sweet thoughts come to mind, how we seemed designed

to be “one” … tho, we were once two.

With soothing soft sound, wind blows drops around,

pattering ‘gainst my windowpane.

I’ve oft’ wondered why, resigned with a sigh,

’tis insane, almost inhumane,

that all we've been through , so in-love we two,

our bodies will never embrace.

It’s so hard to bear that you’re everywhere …

in everything, I see your face!

Your bright, spark’ling eyes, warm, smooth velvet thighs

imagined enfolding my frame.

Oh, come sate this thirst, ere parched hungers burst;

softly, our rain’s whisp’ring your name.

Heard, each daffodil ‘neath my windowsill

beckon in your lush, luring voice.

The harder it pours, like thundering roars,

our coursing blood leaves us no choice.

Deep, hot passions surge - into one we merge;

the earth 'neath our world stirs around.

Secure in our rain, two lovers ordain

to be evermore tightly bound.

Richard W. Jenkins

©2017 

Author's Note

Image courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.

Well-meant, constructive critique is always welcomed! : )

Reviews

[Con Campbell]

Phenomenal. I love your rhyming scheme, the writing style. Your poetic choices flow perfectly. There's a melancholy to the poem, but yet it still feels somewhat hopeful. Like waiting for someone you love to come home and they're running late.

Genuinely great writing - I'll be reading more!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Con, ever-so humbly and gratefully for your praise and expressed enjoyment.
The poem is composed in one of my own forms/rhyme-schemes, "Tens 'n Eights", which accounts for much of its flow and easy cadence.
I enjoyed your take and interpretation on this piece very much, too, as they tell me you really read it and grasped it essence … what bard could wish for more.

With sincerity, I humbly bow, Dear Poet! ⁓ Richard

[Dave]

I feel the rain as a cleansing of all that we wish forgotten. A refreshing of the love once had
and the hope, the prayer for its renewal. What a beautiful episode you portray with your words.

[Richard🖌]

Dear Dave,
Your review, a touching poem in itself, speaks so wisely and beautifully to your keen grasp of this poem's core essence.
What could be more gratifying to an olde bard's hopes to connect with others and please them through his humble efforts.

Thank you most graciously, My Fine Friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dave]

Richard -
I see and hear you as poetry alive. Thank you so much for your works.
read moreRichard -
I see and hear you as poetry alive. Thank you so much for your works.

Take care - Dave

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful in all areas the ebb and flow of the use of words so true, bringing the two alive. Such love one can only hope for and search for - the wait will be worth it. 🌹

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Kelly,
Your gracious expressions of understanding and interpretation are eclipsed only by the gentle praise that let's a bard know his earnest, though humble, efforts have touched another.
It is so very true, Kelly, and if there were an ounce of truth in this piece for the man whose pen scribed it, the wait would be well worth it … smiles and most grateful hugs to Thee! ⁓ Richard 🌸

[emmajoy]

Without any excuses or fawning, i can only say this is expresses more than everything for those who haven't your romantic language. Perhaps that rain are the tears of lovers apart but always knowing there's true love been the two.. For many, tis.. if only.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, emmajoy.
I greatly appreciate your generously shared insights.
read moreThank you sincerely, emmajoy.
I greatly appreciate your generously shared insights.

May your moments be amply blessed! ⁓ Richard

[Chase Dylan]

*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

A loving rain of passionate embrace... My daffodil sits in lush allure... Hot and cold intermingle in this delicately delivering love poem...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you for your informative review, Silente.

The Forum New Thread does not work on your Pure Rhymes site, and how are we to interact there, share, etc??

Blessings! ⁓ Richard

[lightsong]

sometimes it's better to leave without "a stack of words"... it's simply the complete surrender to Love's primal flow, to Love's Kismet, in the senses and mind, in a "whole" way that even everything around flow with the same rhythm... in sadness and happiness, in pain and joy...

it's simply the surrender of the universe to Love's primal flow...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Dear GH*
The impetus of your words strike a chord deep and sincere, felt in sensations derived by such a harmonious heart's flowing raindrops of beautiful emotions, washing over my own.

I fully agree, all things surrender to Love, GH … that is genuinely true! ⁓ Richard : )

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing and beautiful use of words. You made the reader believe in love and the rainy night. Thank you Richard for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Hey, Dear John!
What a pleasure to receive your read of this romantic little piece and the warmth of your encouraging and appreciative words.

You are truly welcome, and I thank you ever-so gratefully, too, my very fine friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[DIVYA]

Heard, each daffodil ‘neath my windowsill
beckon in your lush, luring voice.
The harder it pours, like thundering roars,
our coursing blood leaves us no choice.

My favorite verse there. This is such a divine poem on rain, dear Richard. You have skilfully brought out the gentle sensuality that lovers associate with rain. It sets the stage for romance with its soft, alluring verses, great flow and rhyming.

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Lady Divya!
You've highlighted a very beautiful verse that I, too, enjoy quite nicely … how wonderful to know we've connected so warmly.
The glow, praise, and expressed appreciation and understanding from your words is gratification an olde bard works so hard in hope of receiving.

I feel so deeply blessed … thank you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard ✨

PS … I love your new profile photo … you've grown even lovelier with time. ; )

[DIVYA]

Saved among favorites forever. You are welcome, dear poet. For its a priviledge to read and learn from you.

Many thank yous for the sweet compliment on the pic :)

[Richard🖌]

"B l u s h !" 😊

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I really love how it ended. The last two line speak a lot. When an individual sees who supposed to be his love, it really make sense. No regret. Well crafted.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Poet, for selecting one of my pieces to read and comment on, and for your encouraging praise, expressed appreciation, and understanding, as-well!

Brightest blessings to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Angelheart1]

Richard- I love the following lines and am now waiting to sate that thirst of ours. I’m sorry to be so brazen- but your words brings out the wanton woman in me.

“Your bright, spark’ling eyes, warm, smooth velvet thighs
imagined enfolding my frame.
Oh, come sate this thirst, ere parched hungers burst;
softly, our rain’s whisp’ring your name.”
Your special Angel

[Richard🖌]

Such an enticingly-lovely invite, Angel!
The words of your review are hotter than my poem, and the invite, though tempting, may be more than an olde bard's heart can take … LOL!
It is wonderful to know, however, one of my pieces actually touched someone that deeply.
Yes, I can certainly see how that verse may inspire the senses quite nicely, too. ; )

Thank you most sincerely and warmly, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard : )

[Angelheart1]

You are a joy to read sir and touched is putting it mildly.