Our Rain (love's irony)

Tens 'n Eights

"Our Rain"

It’s raining here now, quite charming - somehow,

rain gently reminds me of You.

Sweet thoughts come to mind, how we seemed designed

to be “one” … tho, we were once two.

With soothing soft sound, wind blows drops around,

pattering ‘gainst my windowpane.

I’ve oft’ wondered why, resigned with a sigh,

’tis insane, almost inhumane,

that all we've been through , so in-love we two,

our bodies will never embrace.

It’s so hard to bear that you’re everywhere …

in everything, I see your face!

Your bright, spark’ling eyes, warm, smooth velvet thighs

imagined enfolding my frame.

Oh, come sate this thirst, ere parched hungers burst;

softly, our rain’s whisp’ring your name.

Heard, each daffodil ‘neath my windowsill

beckon in your lush, luring voice.

The harder it pours, like thundering roars,

our coursing blood leaves us no choice.

Deep, hot passions surge - into one we merge;

the earth 'neath our world stirs around.

Secure in our rain, two lovers ordain

to be evermore tightly bound.

Richard W. Jenkins

©2017 

Author's Note

Image courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.

Well-meant, constructive critique is always welcomed! : )

Reviews

[Con Campbell]

Phenomenal. I love your rhyming scheme, the writing style. Your poetic choices flow perfectly. There's a melancholy to the poem, but yet it still feels somewhat hopeful. Like waiting for someone you love to come home and they're running late.

Genuinely great writing - I'll be reading more!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Con, ever-so humbly and gratefully for your praise and expressed enjoyment.
The poem is composed in one of my own forms/rhyme-schemes, "Tens 'n Eights", which accounts for much of its flow and easy cadence.
I enjoyed your take and interpretation on this piece very much, too, as they tell me you really read it and grasped it essence … what bard could wish for more.

With sincerity, I humbly bow, Dear Poet! ⁓ Richard

[aine]

This is some amazing writing. Beautiful feels.

[Richard🖌]

Sincere thanks to you, aine, for your very nice comment and praise … you've gratified a hard-working poet's efforts in such a way he feels truly blessed! ⁓ Richard : )

[aine]

It was truly well deserved, Richard. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

hot, so romantic ...strong use of metaphor throughout ..i really like this one Richard ..to be read to ones lover for sure ..the 10s and 8s certainly crate the tempo ..just a fine poem in my opinion ..great and inspiring read
E.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so sincerely, My Fine Friend! : )
To receive such accolades and inspiring words from a poet of your caliber, makes writing and sharing more than a worthwhile rewarding effort.

Gene, you've made an olde bard smile with happiness! ⁓ Richard : )

[Ardra]

its breathtakingly beautiful as a fresh splash of rain on the face :) loved it....
you are like the master of Romance lol...

loved the photo too .. good to be back and reading wonderful poem of yours

[Richard🖌]

With warmest thanks, Ria,
I, too, and glad you've returned and selected one of my poems to greet you in such a sweet, abiding way, and what a wonderful compliment you pay my humble efforts, as an earnest composer of poetry, who loves to please his readers.

A huge hug of thanks to thee, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

[heavenscentgirl1]

My dear Richard, how do I begin to explain what I am feeling after reading this beautiful romantic Masterpiece that you have laid out on the page? You know how much I love the rain so this piece resonates very tender and deep feelings within my very core ~ leaving me somewhat breathless and jealous of who may have inspired you to write of such feelings that have been shared with us through your words.

I continue to be amazed that you write as if your words are meant only for the reader thus, melts the heart of any woman who reads them. I have read your words over and over, each time finding each line/stanza more beautiful than before and the picture made my heart flutter as memories of long ago came to mind.

Richard, thanks for sharing your romantic heart with us my very special friend. ❤️

Blessings and big hugs,
~ mj

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Mary Jo,
Thank you sincerely and warmly for blessing my earnest efforts with such praise, appreciation, feeling, and enjoyment … from such a skilled poetess, this is high gratuity, indeed, I did not expect, but most happily accept! ; )
Yes, rain can speak a special language only lovers can hear, both women and men, bringing many thoughts, sensations, and memories flooding into their hearts, and it is pleasure to know my words return yours to you in such wondrous ways.
I suppose the inspiration from many years of yearning thoughts, feelings, desires, sensations, etc; have culminated to bring such a piece as this to life. : )

The pleasure is mine, Mary Jo … I most warmly thank you, too! ⁓ Richard : )

[heavenscentgirl1]

Yes, this one is special and holds a very special place within my heart. Thanks again for sharing YOU with us my friend. ❤️

[Richard🖌]

The pleasure is mine! : )

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A beautiful, deep poem as always.
Raw, passionate love has a way of creating another world inside our existing ones where only two people reside.
A charming piece of art, Mr. Jenkins!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sooo delightfully, Dear Lady Jyoti! : )
I've missed your lovely self and your always pleasurable words in review to one of my humble little pieces … you've a special way about you that speaks softly unto the core with warmest understanding, praise, and romantically feminine delight.

Thank you ever-so warmly and sincere, My Ever Charming Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Woah! Thank you very much!
I am humbled