Fortune

If I hit the lottery

for fifty million bucks

they would declare with certainty,

“Now there’s a gal with luck!”

 

If I became a superstar

with tabloid-worthy fame

they’d say I had a charmed life

each time they heard my name

 

I’ve won the family lotto;

I’ve achieved friendly renown

The people in my life provide

The best fortune around

Author's Note

So corny... but true just the same!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love corny when it's in a field like this.

friends and families ...the loved ones...that's all we need...at least that is all i need to be happy.

[Rita L. Sev]

Simple truths... Thanks, Jacob.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A very good title. A beautiful write and thoughtful piece. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Good flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Rhyme is good. Every second/fourth line of each stanza is a mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Good depth of feeling. I like the humor. Good word choice and use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley - some fun with rhyme, you know me! ;)

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome Rita. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Have a great day!

[Illidan]

I usually don't like rhyming poems because they typically seem forced, but this one didn't! ever since I joined this site I've seen so many great and fun rhyming poems and this is one of them! and indeed the people in our lives provide "the best fortune around" :) good write!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Illidan! I'm glad you enjoyed this - and yes, there are so many great poets here!

[Sami Khalil]

wow. All true and well spoken. That is the real treasure of life and you have gained that along with your great talent let's not forget that...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Thank you for such sweet words, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)