What I Do Not Love About You...

What I Do Not Love About You...

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
"

An unlove poem

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A gentleman in the bakery

          with a racing form in the back pocket

          of his faded jeans

 

stopped me short

 

And simple recollections gathered

behind my dry-out-in-public eyes

 

~ Sunday morning diner breakfasts

~ silly songs you’d sing

~ dancing to Daddy’s Little Girl

 

Warmed on this cold autumn morning

          to the point of burn

 

I loved everything about you, but

 

…I do not love

          missing you…

© 2013 Rita L. Sev


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Awww. Rita you trapped me. LOL I went into this poem thinking it would be something else from the title and came away from it connecting on the feeling of absence and loss. Bravo! I felt this poem. It reminded me of things that have happened recently in my own life. Great job on this poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Eddie - sorry for the trap, but I am happy this resonated. Absence and loss are so hard, .. read more
And simple recollections gathered
behind my dry-out-in-public eyes

and

Warmed on this cold autumn morning
to the point of burn

are my favorite lines. The end does not disappoint. It echoes with dreamy wishes and longing. I feel the words to my core. Lovely penned. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Blue. This is not my usual style, but was from the heart... I appreciate your wo.. read more
Wonderful build up of the immediate physical to the memories and the clever ending.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, John
I loved everything about you, but



…I do not love

missing you…

that's warm and sweet. A piece with great personal touches :) Loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Anand, for your kind words.
Absence makes the heart grow fonder !

A terrific sentimental poem !

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Tom!
This is an interesting poem. I like how the poem kind of belies its title, and how the loving memories aren't typically thought of as attractive attributes. They suggest the love interest is happily poor, but in a charming way.

Nicely written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Epipsych. Funny, you have hit on something - this is about my father, a man who was charm.. read more
Epipsychologist

7 Years Ago

I'm glad I had a good read, you provided me with it :)
I relate to those moments where unexpectedly something triggers past memories.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Yes, and though they are wonderful memories, the ache of missing is sharp...
SteveB has a keen perception . I couldn't figure out what is loved but not missed ? You are really great poets. I still got a lot to learn . What a wonderful piece here Rita . You changed your mood and genre with this piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Neil. I don't often go to the melancholy, but when I do, it's usually about my f.. read more
NeiL ArandA

7 Years Ago

That was so sweet of you . You must be a daddy's girl .
An un-Rita piece but still magnificent. You boiled down the essense of the moment and without mentioning your father made his spirit clear as crystal. I enjoyed the simple unadorned wording here. Ech memory concrete and boiled down to its essense.
Brava Rita!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Steve. Your review brought tears; I appreciate the fact that you saw him here..... read more
such a nice ending. I enjoyed reading

Posted 7 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Cassie.

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