Dust

My soul

feels

the burn

of humanity

 

I sweep the dust

under the rug,

 

where it smolders.

 

Today,

instead,

 

I will rise

 

from

the

ashes

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is definitely inspiring. Great job!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Brittany!

[kublakhan27]

A departure of sorts for you my friend...I was anticipating a dark piece after the first half or so but it gets a positive lift at the end...I'm still shaking those ashes off but hopefully I'll be mobile enough to rise at some point haha Nicely done Rita :)

[Rita L. Sev]

You know me, Steve - I have to take a dip in the deep end every once in a while... This is a nod to my Catholic traditions... Thanks!

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure my friend, and a fine tribute :) My pattern goes the opposite way, as you've probably noticed by now haha

[Rita L. Sev]

That's what we call "balance in the Universe"... :) LOL!

[kublakhan27]

LOL Oh it's great for the Universe, it's my balance I'm worried about ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

well done Rita; thought provoking and inspiring at the same time ... this is a wonderful time in the Catholic Church and tho not a member I am always humbled and reminded of our place on the earth .. as well as God's Son Jesus Christ ...

"I sweep the dust
under the rug,

where it smolders." really gets me .. beautiful!
E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, E - yes, I always feel more connected to my faith during Lent... So glad this resonated.

[Cassie]

Inspiring this is. This is good Rita

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks so much, Cassie

[Baby Ricochet]

I really like this one. Great job kid.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Mark - and thanks for the "kid"... LOL!

[Frieda P]

Wow Rita, this one gave me goosebumps, an affecting few lines. Kudos!

[Rita L. Sev]

Goosebumps - what a compliment! :) Thank you, Frieda!

[Marie]

Nice. Beginning of Lent/beginning of life.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Marie - yes, this is my view of the season.

[A. Amos]

Simply splendid, enjoyed the read and thanks for sharing

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, A - glad you enjoyed!

[m.s.early]

This is a great example of simple and effective poetry. You sweep the embers under the mat and feel the smoldering only to burn and destroy at some point, but rather create an existence, an entity from them and rise.

Awesome.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Xavier!

[Jack...]

A little dark one here my friend. Something different but something wonderful.

[Rita L. Sev]

A bit shadowed, but the light is coming... Thank you, Jack.