Grasping Twilight

This morning I was six years old,

       to misery immune

but as each moment came to pass,

       I’d grown by afternoon

now as dusk descends her veil

       I day-dream in the twilight,

while grasping sun and clouds

and stars…

       how old I’ll be tonight

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"each moment came to pass,
I’d grown by afternoon"

A wonderful poem Rita about the awareness of time and aging with great natural imagery. It makes me think if we are immune from its misery or not. Excellent...:)...................

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Sami! :) So glad you enjoyed this!

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...........................

[Stephen]

A good read for those of us who have had to grow up faster than we should have due to circumstances beyond our control. One day I was 7, now 34 years later I am old. Thanks!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

And even in a "carefree" life, it moves so very fast... Thank you, Stephen.

[Sasha]

Wow..!
Beautiful poem !
Loved it !

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sasha - glad you enjoyed.

[Rita L. Sev]

A perfect poem in such a few lines Rita, I thoroughly enjoyed this one, reminded me of the "Ephemera Danica" or the mayfly... just to live and grow old in one day. Fantastic.

- Elisa

[Rita L. Sev]

Some days it certainly feels that way... and every year flies by in a moment's time... Thank you, Elisa!

So true, before we know indeed... you are welcome Rita :)

[Cassie]

Aging is not that bad, makes us grow wiser with each passing day

[Rita L. Sev]

So true... I really would never want to go backward. Thanks, Cassie.

[raj24]

how old you will be..nice question.. but with such beautiful words.. i feel that age will not matter much..:).. its a nice and short.. thanks for sharing :)

Raj

[Rita L. Sev]

I tell people that I plan to live 100 years... and that will be the blink of an eye... Thank you, Raj!

[raj24]

n i say i will always be 24 till i die :)

[Cory Barrett]

Rita!
What a wonderful piece!

There is some much here in such a short piece. Time marching by one step at a time in its uncontrollable manner, we do anything we can to hold on to one more tick of the clock. I adore this!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Cory! Glad you got that reference to holding on to it all... Glad you liked this!

[J. K. Beach]

I really like the metaphor here... life in a day! We should all live as if this were true... Very beautiful, Rita!

[Rita L. Sev]

It moves so quickly... Thank you, J.K.

[Sheila Kline]

Twilight of the day is one of my favorite times as the world seems to smooth out at the rough edges with a subtle glow flowing 'cross the land.
I can just imagine looking at all the stars and wondering what is next.....lovely thoughts!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks so much, Sheila!

[Baby Ricochet]

Really nice Rita. I wouldn't mind being 6 again. Those were happy times

[Rita L. Sev]

Indeed... Thanks, Mark