Stupid me

Stupid me

A Poem by SimplyDisastrous

Stupid me,
I thought you cared,
all those nights you bared
through the pain of talking to me.

I was a fool,
to think that you'd
ever loved me.

how could I not see
that you wanted to be
with her and not me.


I thought we would be together forever
but you left no clue behind as to why you left whatsoever.



© 2010 SimplyDisastrous


Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Know That I Too
We are never alone (a poem for mental health month)

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SimplyDisastrous
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theres a good rhyme and ring to it. pretty catchy. your ending line put the finishing touch for me and you could feel emotion. you could have put a stanza in there describing the emotion and feelings you felt which would've made it so much better. also personally i dont really like the idea of placing abbreviated words in poems. good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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For a sad poem it was writen very well! I love this poem. You show how you feel, How upsetting someone love can be. Keep up the awesome work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such romantic problems. I know where you're coming from. How easily we're misled into lust disguised as love. I, for a pleasant change, have no suggestions for this piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very emotional, very well-written, very good job on a very good poem! I really like this, there's so much sadness in it, you really portrayed your feelings well!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sad, but still well-written. It's very emotional, especially the last stanza. The ending couplet also ties it up very nicely.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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SimplyDisastrous

Hartford, CT



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Hey. I used to be on here alot when I was 15. Now, not so much. I'm 18 now and I'm not nearly as depressing as I used to be, but still depressing enough. Message me and feel free to read my old poems... more..

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