A little help

It coursed through my veins,

It wiped all the hurt away,

It erased my thoughts and feelings

Of  you and everything having to do with you

Sure, it burned my throat, burned a trail down my throat

Deepened the hole in my heart and made the room spin

But it helped, more than you and every other person who’s ever

Hurt me has. <3  

Author's Note

People aren't the only thing that help with broken hearts.

Reviews

[FocusedAmnesia]

Good read. It flowed beautifully.

[Gianna Perry]

Another great poem, Kristen. So much talent! :)

[Andrew Wright]

I like your use of imagery here... your words left an imprint. great read.

[1416]

I like this, especially how you stress the point of "Deepened the hole in my heart and made the room spin". You make it known that it helps for a moment, but doesn't actually erase all of the effects of what has happened. Good job :)

[J.S. Pua]

"Sure, it burned my throat, burned a trail down my throat
Deepened the hole in my heart and made the room spin"

I think this is about.....
an alcoholic beverage..
and how it helped you with your broken heart..

nice..
good work..

[deeps]

This is touching

[Anas]

"Deepened the hole in my heart and made the room spin"
this was nice regardless of the pain associated! I really like it (:

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wow, this is deeply touching.

[Jack Inthebox]

That is really emotive I liked this immensely.

[x x]

Firewater :) I enjoyed it, my only qualm is that to me, it feels like the meter on the the fifth line is kind of off, but that might just be me.