Submission

Kill me but don’t leave me,
for I will be dead without you.

Hurt me but forgive me,
for not hurting you back.

You have tangled me in your madness
until I could think no more,
Yet I am drowning into submission
don’t leave me I implore.

You have laughed at my
tears, for so many years,
and tear my heart apart,
still I am always begging
you to forgive me, but
soon you restart.

One day my fear will fade away,
and all that I am going to say,
 is goodbye and depart.

Author's Note

This poem is about someone I meet while she was going through a very rough path in her life. I wrote it and give it to her. A little less then 5 months later, she wrote to me to say that she moved back to her country of origin and that the poem saved her from the bad situation she was. Sometimes one can be so deeply into a situation that becomes blind and forget its own power. But the inner power was always there.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Amazing backstory & amazing message to this friend in your life. It's almost impossible to think of something inspiring to say to a person who is in a bad situation & needs to leave it, but most are not open to being told what they need to do. Your approach is very unexpected & effective becuz you spend most of the words being empathetic, & only gently suggesting how this will end in a good way, at the very end, without being preachy. Just a simple statement of uplifting hope, which is such a good way to approach this kind of situation. I'm impressed! Fondly, Margie

[Silmara McGarry]

You are so very right! She could not see what she was doing to herself until she read it in words.read moreYou are so very right! She could not see what she was doing to herself until she read it in words.
Many thanks indeed Margie for reading and your understanding words! :-)))

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem. The perfect use of description create place and need.
"Kill me but don’t leave me, for I will be dead without you
Hurt me but forgive me for not hurting you back"
Submission lead to dark places with no return. Thank you Silmara for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Silmara McGarry]

Yes, you are right!
But in her case, she did manage to came out of the dark place also called, submission.
Thanks God, she did.
Thank you indeed for your review...See you :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[Gee]

It is amazing just how one sided love can be. Great opening line. 'Tis a fine thing indeed that you wrote this, delivered, and it opened the eyes of the recipient. You're a good 'un

[Silmara McGarry]

Yes it is, I must agree with you. Thank you indeed, Gee! ;-) Sil

[Gee]

My pleasure, welcome to WC, hope you have fun

[Silmara McGarry]

Ohhh... Thanks so much! I am having fun already :-)

[Lord of mad men]

Very powerful. You can do anything you put you mind to never forget that. The mind is your greatest tool.

[Silmara McGarry]

True.This poem is about someone I meet while she was going through a very rough path in her life. A little less then 5 months later, she wrote to me to say that the poem saved her from the bad situation she was. So, she used the power of her mind to change her life. You are right, the mind is our greatest tool. Thanks for taking the time to read and review it.