King of Flawed Reason

Festering molestation of achin'...

I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...

I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...

For the reason I stand alone most the time...

Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...

Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...

I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...

Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...

Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...

A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...

So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...

The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...

Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...

Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...

Just scars...

Author's Note

Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

Reviews

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

[Silente-Write]

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed

[Robert Trakofler]

Did you just type out the silhouette pattern for one of those space invaders creatures from the 1978 console video game and inadvertently discover the theory of everything? OOOOOOOOOOOOOH never mind i just needed to clean my glasses. Chances are you did fall again cause just when you thought you have reached your absolute zero toleration space left... you fall! Land flat on your face release a gigantic mind fart literally the gas is expelled from the mind and out of your nose and ears leaving you no chance to avoid the stench whatsoever! Gives you just a... terribly, annoying headache too. But low and beholding the cycle begins afresh:) P.S. I have been told if you ingest a decent quantity of Sen Sen before said miasma release occurs you can alleviate some of the noxious.

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

I think your excellent rhymes are more than enough of a reason not to doubt yourself. As for depression, and not feeling good enough, I understand the feeling. If I can’t write, I feel useless. I’m really depressed, and haven’t seen friends in months. I only leave the house to exercise. And when I can’t write I feel worthless. I’ve gotten so hungry for it that I’ve pushed back collabs because I feel the need to be solitary.

But look at all the people here. You inspired them. Me and several hundred others. Isn’t that a success story?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed depression is like caving. The deeper you go the narrower it gets. You have captured those feelings in a 'rap' of a poetic offering filled with salutary meaning.

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much, John
Avoid the cave walls, that is all, aha

[Christine Anne Shaw]

I think you are perfect at wearing the crown of flawed reason. Depression plays on our insecurities and can reduce us from being a lion to a mouse. It can do it quickly as well. All those bloomin negatives can play havoc. You can go down hill fast, but it takes alot longer to climb back up. That's where your lines took me Silente.

Chris

[Silente-Write]

D'aw.... Tank'z, Chris...
I enjoyed where my lines took you more than I enjoy my lines at this point...!
A crown in the shape of one size fits all...
So be careful you do not get it plonked on your head!
It looks nice to wear, but I assure you...
It is HEAVY

[Christine Anne Shaw]

Never been fond of the limelight. You can keep the crown and the jewels. They ain't me :)

[Silente-Write]

IKR... But, you see... The crown chooses the owner... Not I...

[gram linski]

King of flawed reason was perfect in it's imperfection, your rhymes are banging, great poem

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much, Gram
Bang up insight, imperfect within perfection within... Etc... Good eye!

[Do]

a great write!! everyone is imperfectly perfect and flawlessly flawed.

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. So true, my friend

[Richard McLin]

Again you show why you are a poetry badass. This is a great piece, words you don't always see in poetry are not only used here, but you can't imagine the piece without them. Great job on another fine piece.
-Richard

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. I love your compliments... Lol

[AKhaus]

excellent flow, word choices and expression...I really enjoyed this read.

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.

[R.E. Ray]

Yes, it's dark but strength, resilience, and courage shine through at the end. The rhyming is good, the pace excellent, the ending perfect. We get our asses kicked sometimes, but we get back in the fight. Nice work.

[Silente-Write]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.