King of Flawed Reason

King of Flawed Reason

A Poem by Silente-Write
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Imperfection...

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Festering molestation of achin'...
I'm separated by my own demons, my own feelings leapt alive with meanin'...
I'm crowning myself king of flawed reason...
For the reason I stand alone most the time...
Is I'm not feeling very grown at the time...
Like a seed with no warmth, a man outta lines, my rhymes are not good enough...
I stow it under and keep grumblin', actin' tough, mining away and wondering if it will ever be true...
Will I follow a shining path or break hollow and used...
Blasted by traces of iced gas, leaving me numb and bruised...
A rats uncle I'm stuffy and masked, you are sultry and out of grasp...
So I gasp and raise myself above the bar, I raise my own bar...
The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars...

© 2017 Silente-Write


Author's Note

Silente-Write
Sometimes depression is crippling... Hope everyone reading this remembers they are not alone in the fight... Keep living day-to-day, and know you are valued... Have a good one

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This is so abstract, and so beautiful, just as always. I specially love the lines,

"The imperfection flawed is tar that stops and harms...
Will I garner enough force to engulf mars...
Or will I fall hard and overwhelmed...
Just scars..."

Just so beautiful.

Love,
Vasilees

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

As always, a beautiful review, Vasilees, thank you, and am glad you enjoyed



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Did you just type out the silhouette pattern for one of those space invaders creatures from the 1978 console video game and inadvertently discover the theory of everything? OOOOOOOOOOOOOH never mind i just needed to clean my glasses. Chances are you did fall again cause just when you thought you have reached your absolute zero toleration space left... you fall! Land flat on your face release a gigantic mind fart literally the gas is expelled from the mind and out of your nose and ears leaving you no chance to avoid the stench whatsoever! Gives you just a... terribly, annoying headache too. But low and beholding the cycle begins afresh:) P.S. I have been told if you ingest a decent quantity of Sen Sen before said miasma release occurs you can alleviate some of the noxious.

Posted 2 Months Ago


I think your excellent rhymes are more than enough of a reason not to doubt yourself. As for depression, and not feeling good enough, I understand the feeling. If I can’t write, I feel useless. I’m really depressed, and haven’t seen friends in months. I only leave the house to exercise. And when I can’t write I feel worthless. I’ve gotten so hungry for it that I’ve pushed back collabs because I feel the need to be solitary.

But look at all the people here. You inspired them. Me and several hundred others. Isn’t that a success story?

Posted 2 Months Ago


Indeed depression is like caving. The deeper you go the narrower it gets. You have captured those feelings in a 'rap' of a poetic offering filled with salutary meaning.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much, John
Avoid the cave walls, that is all, aha
I think you are perfect at wearing the crown of flawed reason. Depression plays on our insecurities and can reduce us from being a lion to a mouse. It can do it quickly as well. All those bloomin negatives can play havoc. You can go down hill fast, but it takes alot longer to climb back up. That's where your lines took me Silente.

Chris

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

D'aw.... Tank'z, Chris...
I enjoyed where my lines took you more than I enjoy my lines at thi.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Never been fond of the limelight. You can keep the crown and the jewels. They ain't me :)
Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

IKR... But, you see... The crown chooses the owner... Not I...
King of flawed reason was perfect in it's imperfection, your rhymes are banging, great poem

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much, Gram
Bang up insight, imperfect within perfection within... Etc... Good eye!
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a great write!! everyone is imperfectly perfect and flawlessly flawed.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. So true, my friend
Again you show why you are a poetry badass. This is a great piece, words you don't always see in poetry are not only used here, but you can't imagine the piece without them. Great job on another fine piece.
-Richard

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. I love your compliments.. read more
excellent flow, word choices and expression...I really enjoyed this read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
Yes, it's dark but strength, resilience, and courage shine through at the end. The rhyming is good, the pace excellent, the ending perfect. We get our asses kicked sometimes, but we get back in the fight. Nice work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.

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