Prelude

Prelude

A Chapter by Nataliya Maize
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Watchers, waiting for the chance to change the course of our history; altering the very fabric of our reality, along with everything we've come to know and love. And now that chance had come, and I was the only one standing in their way...

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          In the beginning, a third of the heavens were lost to Lucifer in the rebellion against our God Evo. A division among realms, that created two eternal dwelling places. One, now housing a multitude of demonic creatures, and a lost league of angelic beings; never again would they follow the ways of our Lord. Creatures, excommunicated for their betrayal. Living within a realm hidden from us all, for a period of a thousand years, and cast away by the hands of the Angel Abaddon -the angel with the key to the Abyss.

         Forever would these fallen souls remain followers and servants of Lucifer and his hellish empire. Until one day, when the realization of Lucifer's failures gave rise to a mutinous uprising.

          Now, with these fearsome hordes, the Dark One's traitorous second in command, Azazel, would attempt to change the fate of his dark brethren. He would lead his stolen army of the-Fallen in a revolt against the authority of Lucifer. Obsessed with the means to control and create a third realm; a hell on earth and the dawning of a new era for mankind. 

         It was said that once the gate to the abyss was opened after a period of a thousand years, angels of both good and evil, would roam the earth once more as guardians and predators of man. Watchers, waiting for the chance to change the course of our history; altering the very fabric of our reality, along with everything we've come to know and love. And now that chance had come, and I was the only one standing in their way...

 

 

 

 

 

            Angel with the key hurls the dragon into the Abyss, The; another angel shows John the New Jerusalem

Notes from the Author:

Prelude to The Gatekeeper Chronicles was inspired by the C. 1496-98 Woodcutting image "Angel with the Key of the Abyss" by Albrecht Durer; a German painter, printmaker, and theorist of Nuremberg, Bavaria, Germany.



© 2009 Nataliya Maize


Author's Note

Nataliya Maize
To be honest I really don't read very much, partly because I just don't have the time while taking care of two little ones. And partly because I don't want to allow myself to much influence from other writer styles so that I don't come off as a copy cat. That doesn't mean I don't like "constructive criticism" because I'm a huge fan of it. I think it's the best way for us writers to learn from our mistakes. But for the most part, a majority of my writing on this book, has come mere images in my head, and dreams that I managed to wake myself up from and jot down, so really I'm just writing them down on paper the best way I can.

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'Wow', that was the first word that came to my mind as I finished reading this. I haven't yet read the other chapters, but basing from this prelude, I'm pretty sure it'll be one amazing story. I like the fact that the prelude is short, direct to the point, and oh-so captivating. It gives a glimpse as to what this story's going to be about while at the same time preserving the story itself for the later chapters.

I know there's no such thing as a perfect piece, but I think criticizing this is beyond me. I can only say that I find this wonderful in every sense--the tone, grammar, mood, setting and everything else is just so excellent. You did a great job in here. Best of luck.

Keep Writing. ^___^

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I love the picture you added to this chapter, it is beautiful. I also loved the writing (duh!) This was amazingly written. Interesting.

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thats awesome. I love angels vs. demon's type stories and yours sounds amazing

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Interesting prelude, I like especially the end. "I was the only one standing in their way..." - that always has effect as we like the stories of one standing against masses. Though I don't read any religious related work, I might add you to the exception list.
I'll sure check out the rest of the chapters sometime.
BTW: Great title that also appears to be going nicely with your story!

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Hmmm...well I'm confused. And I even read more than once because I can be occasionally slow to catch on. But I'm still confused. The last paragraph was great; I totally understood that one, and it was very well written. I got the impression that heavens are split into thirds, which was never elaborated. Later it refers to creating a third realm, a hell on earth. So are there three realms in heaven, and two on earth? lol I don't know, maybe I am just slow. Other than that it sounds interesting and you have a distinct voice that rings with authority and an undertone of malevolence - in this piece, at any rate. Keep writing =]
Z

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ominous, great commencement, I love epics, and nothing better than greek mythology and the bible to lead a write, ---mishel --as in here was chosen the latter.

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A very interesting opening. I love epic tales and this prelude seems to point in that direction for thise story.

Well written, a smooth easy read.

I'm moving on to the first journal entry and the then the first chapter. Well done thus far.

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Amazingly introduction to something that sounds exciting and fascinating. I love unique stories like this. I can see nothing at all the critique in the prelude. Everything read smoothly and really caught my eye. I'm definitely going to see where this goes.

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