Gratitude

If it’s true that the night belongs to no one,

and if nobody owns the ebony skies,

then from whom am I borrowing the shadows

that are cleverly concealing my soulless eyes?

And to whom do I give thanks for the howling winds

for expertly disguising your desperate cries?

I would also like to thank them for the moonlight

that lets me see your face as I bury you  with your lies.

 

Author's Note

This happy little poem was inspired by great gusts of wind last night that caused me to look out my window and see a very full moon. The rest is just my twisted thoughts lol

Reviews

[Lorna Lee]

I love this one sis, I can picture you gazing out the window with that look you get on your face while you compose. Something about this line just draws me right in, it's my favorite. Awesome Job!!

"and if nobody owns the ebony skies,
then from whom am I borrowing the shadows
that are cleverly concealing my soulless eyes?"

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Haha like like your twisted thoughts.lol
A very good piece and yip good posed question about owning the night? Nicly written :)

[The Autumn Faerie]

Well, your twisted thoughts have conjured up a pretty good piece of poetry, here.
I really like it.
Just one thing:
The line, 'I would also like to thank them for the moonlight,' seems rather awkward...
Maybe ask of whom you should thank, as you had before; to carry on the pattern?

[Damian Alan Gray]

This reminds me of something the Robert Benchley once said of Dorothy Parker: "Her poesy is akin to a relaxing cruise through a tunnel of love, ended abruptly by a large brick wall." You have a remarkable ability to draw the reader into your thoughts, Tania, and then leave them with a final turn of the screw. Not many poets can pull this off, but you're simply great at the skill.

Well done, my friend!

[Fran Marie]

I would also like to thank them for the moonlight

that lets me see your face as I bury you with your lies.

A short but very descriptive piece of poetic verse which speaks volumes
THanks for sharing this rather dark and well crafted poem~Fran

[Legion]

Very twisted. Cool piece though. Love the whole feel of this. Very dark without being sinister. More of a matter of fact attitude. Great way to go with this. :)

[jen -- JG]

A windy night with a full moon at the same time, can inspire great thoughts and greater poems in a person.
This is one of these poems.

It may all be words and lines but again I feel a double or treble edge to this.

The element of dark aching despair is clear to me here as is the the image of howling winds concealing desperate cries, while the image of moolight gives hope as the despair - the darknes - is buried with its lies.

The imagery here suits several views - one exactly as it is - a dark windy night with a beautiful moon ---- two, the knowledge of what the darkness is, a deep despair with the desperate calls being deafened by the winds, yet there is hope with the moonlight showing the way and letting you bury the past ..... and three - the blank dark feeling we have with writers' block - when the words scream to be heard but are drowned out, but yet again, hope is reborn as the moonlight shows the face of the lies - holding you back.

Your writing is often so deep Tania, that I find myself tangled in the feelings, deep in shadows below your written words.

This is a good write - well put together and thumbs up from me.

Jen-JG

[Kara Emily Krantz]

darn it. totally already reviewed this, then lost it lol

oh well.

anywayyyss... very powerful piece. and i agree with nuala - the form and the structure is just fantastic. and yes, it is shocking - in both it's intensity and it's content.
fantastic job

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Oh...my...gosh. This poem is so amazing!!! I love it, awesome write!!!

Heather

[Robert Luna]

I love it when your imagination takes off. We all get to enjoy the ride. I liked this piece and i loved the way you ask these question to no one but everyone. Made for a great read and a wonderful thought to have rolling around in my head.


Great jOb!!!!!!

[Amor-de-angel]

If your twisted thoughts are this good I hope you don't lose them