Egotistical

To whom it may concern ?

What benefit to be gained
from one's own self worth,
if a heart is bereft of humanity
and of compassion it is dearth?

So if I may before it's too late
offer, some well meant advice,
narcissism is a selfish trait
a characteristic not so nice!

Unassuming and humble be
is the way to lick it,
then the cap will fit your head 
that is the simple trick to it !

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ken venturi...dead now, but was a professional golfer...he told a story about his dad...and what his dad told him...
"when others say you are good" then you are...but if you have to say it yourself, you are no where near being great..

this poem is spot on...saw two spots for edit..second line "one's" and fifth line "before it's too late"

but wow, so well said here...if we have to tell people how great we are...then we aren't.

jacob

[Tom]

You got the gist of my poem exactly Jacob & thanks for your constructive comments ! (I'll fix those now)

[Sami Khalil]

Inspiring to the bones. A worthy and pertinent message. It is, was the downfall of Many people in the history.

[Tom]

Indeed so, thank you Sami 🙏

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome my friend

[Neville]

Unassuming and humble be
Sure is the way to lick it
Take Tom's good all round advice
Now that's what I call cricket

Another good un Tom

[Tom]

I like your style Neville and thanks as always for the visit and comments !

[Neville]

My pleasure Tom

[Frieda P]

Ha this one made me chuckle, yet it's so true, lots of big headed imbeciles who are extremely annoying to say the least....I might send this to one of them if it's alright with you.

[Tom]

Merci buckets Frieda.. Yes please do ! Hit them where it hurts !

[Frieda P]

Grazie, and I'm going to send a note along that says 'even Tom says so...'

[Tom]

As if they'll listen Frieda !!

[Eddie Phillips]

Humorous and truthful! There is never the need to be a egotistical dimwit. Thanks for suggesting this poem. I enjoyed it

[Tom]

Thanks Eddie, glad to see we're both singing from the same hymn sheet !!

[Dream Weaver]

Unfortunately it's a look at me and a me first world...
If you wish to be full of it, why not be full of yourself...
Enjoyed this one tremendously.

[Tom]

Thank you Dream Weaver, excellent summation!

[Dream Weaver]

Your quite welcome..Being studious is one of my vices lol....

[Tom]

Not a bad attribute to possess !

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A good lesson in this one. Narcissism and selfishness are traits to be avoided at all costs in my book. This was cleverly worded and had a nice, even form, which led to the enjoyment of the read. Well done.

[DJ]

Tom, this is a great write my friend. I love the humor you use yet such an honest and powerful message in such a short piece. I completely agree with you. No matter what happens in life, it is so important to remain humble. I despise narcissism, it is a very ugly character trait. Thank you Tom, this was a pleasure to read.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Tom. A very good write and message that is short, concise and succinct. Thought provoking. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Good flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Good depth of feeling. You contrast narcissism and humility beautifully in this short poem. You express this wisdom with power in this piece. Excellent advice to the masses. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, consonance with good assonance. Just a note: line one second stanza should be 'too' instead of to. Good closing lines. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

[Tom]

Thank-you Shelley, a thorough and appreciated evaluation, I'll fix that little grammatical error you quite rightly highlight.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Tom. Always a pleasure. Have a great day!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Well, I believe you have nailed it, Tom! Good for you!...
Narcissism is the most undesirable trait one could have... This is written with subtle humor, yet a firm
slap on the hand.

Nicely penned! :)