Bathtime

A grubby sailor
In a tub of soap water
Where is his washcloth?

Reviews

[Nicole Hellene]

lol!

[Gordon Greene]

Pretty funny visual. (Where's the soap to wash out my minds' eye)?
g.g.

[Krystal Waters]

I had to laugh at this! I liked the humor.

--Krystal--

[Akaila]

this was funny!!dunno where u came up w/ this idea! but it was funny!
~akaila~

[Luna Estella al-Hariri]

This was highly amusing, but I don't think I want to know where you got your inspiration from.

[Melissa M.]

Haha, I like it. I don't know if I like the imagery though....

[Camoens, The Shadow-fir..]

What in the world...? I'm not sure where you get your insparations, but you certainly make interesting haiku, good job following the 5-7-5, though you could make it longer by adding additional verses without hurting the feeling

[Merancapeman]

Ha, loverly. Gave me a little chuckle. I love those subtle, random and funny instances, and you certainly fulfilled that description.

[Aaron]

hahahahahahahhaahahaahahahahhaha

That's great. I've played with haiku forms before and they can be a lot of fun to goof with...

For the last decade or more, I've really attempted a deep study of Aisan culture and perspective. Their way of looking at things is so foreign to ours (no pun intended), even to the point of having non-translatable philosophical concepts. For some reason, their mindset fascinates me to no end and I have a deep respect for their ancient ways. I wish that Western Culture had such depths, but I guess we are what we are. *sighs*

Anyway, not to get to heavy.... I liked this piece. It was truly a good time. :^)

peace
aaron