I know it. She knows it. You know?

You know? [M] Based on a conversation I had today.. All wording is practically how the person said it. So.. Yeah. I kinda turned it into a poem.. Well.. Tried to anyway.

She says alotta things about me.

Because I don’t say a lot back.

And I say, she says that.

And she says I say that.

I say she says I say that.

And I say she says that

She says that I say she says

That I say that. ‘Cause that’s what

I say.

And the reason she does this is

Because she benefits from it.

And I know it, she knows it,

And she knows that I know it.

I know she knows that I know,

And I know she knows and

She knows I know that she knows

That I know it. ‘Cause she knows.

You know?

At least that’s what I think,

Because we are so alike.

And I think that, she thinks that.

And she thinks I think that.

I think she thinks that I think that.

And I think she thinks that

She thinks that I think she thinks

That I think that. ‘Cause that’s how

She thinks.

She knows it, I know it,

You know?

‘Cause that’s just how,

We think.

I think it, She thinks it,

You know?

‘Cause that’s just what,

We say.

Say, think, know alike,

You know?

Author's Note

Took me ages to get the syllables on each line to similar values... Had to use enjambment for once! I think it's rather good ;)
Please review it! Don't just view it! :L
[M]

Reviews

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

You worked the form that you chose very well here. I admit I'm kinda tired so hearing all that repetition was a little overwhelming, but I think after a good cup of coffee this would be rather enjoyable. What I really like about this is that it seems like a conversation, maybe someone frazzled.

[Marley]

I love the "voice" in this piece. I want to hear it spoken because I think it would have better flavor than the voice in my head when I'm reading it. Not to mention, it might help to not read this at 4 in the morning... Ha. :]

I dig the style and the believable-ness of this piece. Pretty sure everyone has had something sort of like this 'relationship.' Excellent writing.

[Randy`s Princess]

wow what great work I love it you truely do have the knack my friend

[kayleigh]

Thats so cool XD

[Emmanuel Rosado]

it awsome i know what u mean i think i know where u goin whit it and is awsome
a lil confusin but that the fun part

[C.smooth]

I like this man you should rap this

[Carlton Lloyd Smith]

I liked this piece quite a bit. Good rhythm and a light message I think everyone can relate to. The only criticism I would offer would be the last two lines. Perhaps if I heard it aloud it would make it work, but to read it it just doesn't seem to flow like the rest of it.

[QuietPoet]

Wow, very interesting write. At first I was confused, but then it made sense as I kept reading. Great talent put into this. Nice job.

[Joy Lynn B.]

Lol I got confused at the beginning and the end. But I caught on!! =P Great piece though! Keep it up :-)

[Jessica]

Get to read the final piece I must say. Good piece, very different. Clear to understand, to me anyway, and well written. Well done. :)