I figured it out

I figured it out

A Poem by al25
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This poem is about a guy struggling with his feelings towards a girl. Shes had enough of his lies and is leaving him. While this is happening he realizes how much she means to him.

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Along she came with her trembling hands

Crying a thousand rivers

She gently held me and said I'm leaving

I just smiled and said let go of me

 

Now words can not describe the way I'm feeling

I'm drowning in the sea

Swimming against the tide

Praying she'd change her mind and stay with me

 

I guess this time your really leaving

I've been serching in my head

For the words to make you stay

It wont be enough this time

Don't walk away and leave me needing

 

All my feelings are bottled inside

If they'd come out I'd be naked

But maybe they'll make you stay

 

You think that your a star the whole world revolves around you

But I can't be without you

You know you've got the power to crush my heart with your smile

No matter how much I'd try

You know I can't make drawings of you perfect enough

 

Now its over

I can't believe its over

I won't believe its over

I won't let it die

 

I'm losing my sense of wrong and right

Shaking from the pain thats in my head

I try to reach inside

But your in too deep

 

Not in a million years could I forget you

You can see it in my eyes I want you to stay

Please don't walk away

 

Forgive me for being too frank but I've never seen anything like you

I can't change yesterday

But I can promise you tomorrow

Why are you still walking away?

 

Its over now and I can't save you

But I'm alright I was playing with your head

I was lying when I said I loved you

But why do you look so good when your walking away

 

I only dream of you and you know it

Maybe you think your too good for me

No I can't let you go your a part of me know

 

Now I'm sitting here all alone

Trying to convice myself that I'm not losing you

And now I feel the pain inside

Because I'm without you

 

No matter how long it takes I would wait for you

Cause there's nothing in here but you

I'd wait a lifetime

I'd wait forever just to be with you

 

Take my life

Take my soul 

Take my heart

Just don't leave me now

 

Its an illusion how can I feel this way

Your vanished and I can no longer smell your scent

But I can't sleep at night

 

I can't let you go

I'm still under your spell

Caught by the taste of your lips

Your under my skin

 

Where are you now?

Though everythings been said and done

I still sit here thinking about you

No matter how hard I fight it

I can't denie it

 

Look at me now I've been up for nights

With my blood shot eyes

You don't even know

I'm still tangeled up in you

 

I can't let you go

I know I broke your heart

But baby I was wrong

If you can hear my heart thats barely breathing

Maybe you'll change your mind

 

So here I am

Standing on your porch

Begging for a second chance

Baby it doesn't matter if its wrong or right

I need your love to make me whole again

 

© 2010 al25


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Wow, this left my heart aching. You have written yourself into your words well here, and that helps make a poem better as well. When an author can leave behind a ghost of himself to haunt his readers, he has truly left his mark. You have done well portraying the raw emotion in its stages, and that's wonderful.

Also, the flow is off, but I too believe that with a poem like this, it just helps leave its mark. In this poem, it works wonders helping get your point across, and I love it. This is one of my favorite pieces.

Posted 9 Years Ago


There is nothing like love. It is the biggest event of our lives. Each and every time it takes us by surprise. Your heart is loud and clear in this poem. Beautiful sentiment.

Posted 10 Years Ago


So beautiful. If only if only. :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


Right from the core of your heart, so deep and emotional, beautiful

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is raw, honest, a purge of deep longing and emotion. I have felt this, beautiful expression.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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deep ever so heart tugging write. i do agree it flows like a song lyric.

Posted 10 Years Ago


i agree that it flows like a song lyric. you do express yourselve very well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


flows like a song~ a well expressed intimate look into the push and pull of relationships~ and that eternal line of "u don't know what o got til it's gone' is interpreted poignantly through your poetic~

Posted 10 Years Ago


Forgive me for being too frank but I've never seen anything like you
I can't change yesterday
But I can promise you tomorrow
Why are you still walking away?

I just love that stanza, it's like the I can see someone standing there, watching the person they love walk away as they confess how much that person means and that person still walking away, it's great imagery. The whole poem is great imagery

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on August 7, 2010
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