Does she?

10/25/13

 

 

 

I heard you're dating someone

a girl just caught your eye

Tell me about this new love

the cause of your "Goodbye".

 

Does she greet you good morning

with breakfast in your bed?

Does she know your fav'rite songs

and sing them in her head?

 

Does she kiss you 'til you're breathless

and treat you like a prince?

Does she keep all your love letters,

not throwing them in bins?

 

Does she sing in the shower

and waltz on the floor?

Does she fix your black necktie

and wave bye from the door?

 

Does she pack up your lunch

a sandwich with a note?

Does she send you thoughtful texts

an "I love you" and a quote?

 

Does she understand your hobbies

the cigars and the games?

Does she also love your friends

the quirks behind the names?

 

Does she miss you when you're gone

and wait 'til you're back?

Does she offer better things

all the things that I lack?

 

Does she love you like I did

or does she love you even more?

And baby, does she even know

she has all I'm wishing for?

 

 

Author's Note

I missed rhymes. :)

Reviews

[annabellee]

This is a really gorgeous poem. It conveys a lot of emotions, heartfelt and well written.
Loved it :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Amazing poem! Right up my alley! Absolutely loved it and all the rhyming. Great job on this !

[Mark]

Nice rhymes. Most of the poem feels like a mother talking to her son.

[Eddie Davis]

Very nice, and well constructed, I saw only one thing, it should be 'And waltz ON the floor' instead of 'In'. It was simple but yet elegant in style. You are certainly a master of rhymes.

[nibhz]

lovely poem! loved the simple rhyming you did! anyone who reads it can feel instantly connected, touching use of simple words! good job! keep it up!

[WithLoveandLoss.]

Really liked this Blue! Longing for a loved one is so common, yet difficult to portray in conversation, and especially in poetry! I have a real connection with this, good work.

[Calibaster]

This is really sad! And really good! You are a word Wizard! :) ;) Nice job!

[Revolutionary]

great poem reminds me of that morriset song from the 90s does she speak eloquently and will she have your baby I bet shell make a realy excellent mother

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hey, can you tell me what the title of the song is? :)

Thank you. :)

[ron]

This is a sad poem Blue. This happened to me more than once, so I can relate to this poem. You are an amazing poet.

[Abbie Batchelder- Jacks..]

WOW, this is amazing! The descriptions, the story, it's beautiful!!!!