Hell.

This is my first poem, so don't hate! I know its horrible XP

  There are crowed hallways,
  and smoke fills
  people's nose.

  This is Hell,
  I am sure of it now.

  I am pushed and shoved,
  scraped and bruised.

  Help me,
  I don't deserve
  to be here.

  People spit on me,
  call me bad names.

  'Help me',
  I say.

  'Save me from
  this jail
  we call home.'

 

Author's Note

Yeees it is terrible. But don't hate, it is my first poem.

Reviews

[Cody McGeary]

I agree with the others, good job for you first. Keep it up.

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe all young people believe what you stated in your poem. One day you will appreciate the free rent and food. A excellent poem. Strong and to the point.
Coyote

[NickyGL]

Its good for a first poem, you have a great talent.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is dark and full of emotion.
You conjure up fear in anyone who reads it.
Sad work..but you have major talent.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

It's not terrible. It's pretty good. I think you did a good job on your first attempt at writing. Thanks for sharing. :D