Exposure

Exposure

A Poem by Chris Shaw

storm's marauding afterlife
leaves eyes of sunrise squinting
.
brooding cloud formations
hang in black curtain heaviness
.
lined with a sliver of silver hem
gleaming with uncertain promise
.
hurled through rough salty waters
from ocean's dark disturbed bed
.
tossed in a surge of soapy foam
angriest of roller-coasters ride in
.
fossils flung far in shifting swell
beached upon dampened sand
.
naked on soft islands surrounded
by wet glistening shingle sharps
.
ammonites bellemnites picked
by fingers clinging to jurassic finds
.

© 2021 Chris Shaw


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I felt like I was there with you dear Chris, after the storm, looking for treasures.... Something I just love to do.
Rained heavily here today but now it is sunny....and we are in June... Oh those poor vacationers... not been great here the past two weeks...
We of course love it... Rain...means not as much watering...
Lisa, shoulder better

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Good morning dear Chris,
7:15 here and I am already on the computer with a nice Cappuccino n.. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Have a wonderful day Lisa.
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Thank you,
Lisa



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Holy smoke! Chris you have outdone yourself with the vividness of this imagery.
"storm's marauding afterlife
leaves eyes of sunrise squinting
.
brooding cloud formations
hang in black curtain heaviness
.
lined with a sliver of silver hem
gleaming with uncertain promise"

such lines cast a picture as vivid as reality itself. The last lines of this poem sum it up nicely and the very words themselves give feel to this piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thanks for a great review Soren. I certainly got inspired by the moody weather :) All the best.
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Chris, everything here is wonderfully described and a pleasure to read. I will pass something along I learned just the other day. I was fortunate enough to have two poems chosen for online critiques from Tim Green, the editor of Rattle. One thing he said was that a poem should "go somewhere" but not where you thought it would go when you started, and not where you want it to go.

The idea came to me that we start a poem, but after that we follow to where our subconscious takes us .
All of a sudden, writing poetry for me has become much more difficult.

Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thanks Winston for sharing. I already find writing difficult. Tim Green’s ideas would have me comp.. read more
hi chris, woweee!! i loved all your stanzas the first one being my favourite.
great word choices & metaphors.
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ for your writing
have a great sunday
cheerio carola


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Hi Carola, thanks for that great encouragement. I certainly became inspired by the stormy weather. A.. read more
I felt like I was there with you dear Chris, after the storm, looking for treasures.... Something I just love to do.
Rained heavily here today but now it is sunny....and we are in June... Oh those poor vacationers... not been great here the past two weeks...
We of course love it... Rain...means not as much watering...
Lisa, shoulder better

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Good morning dear Chris,
7:15 here and I am already on the computer with a nice Cappuccino n.. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Have a wonderful day Lisa.
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Thank you,
Lisa
Wow! You are an Artist of words … the aftermath of a Storm from Oceans Opus Symphony… a Grand Piano playing on Wet Sand with Chords of Ecstacy… a standing Ovation. Lightening and Thunder. gently,, Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Such a poetic review Pat. Thank you so much. The storm certainly inspired my pen. Have a great day. .. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Year Ago

Thank you Chris… the awesome wonders of inspiration bring a peaceful aura to a 🎶 Song… gently.. read more


You shore do know your coasts don't you our Chris .. You just nailed our Jurassic coastline and all its previous inhabitants .. Neville

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Neville for visiting the Jurassic coastline with me. A source of immense fascination. Hunt.. read more
wow. some "exposure". imagery floats as your words roll off of the tongue.

goodness -

lined with a sliver of silver hem
gleaming with uncertain promise

ammonites bellemnites picked
by fingers clinging to jurassic finds

loved every bit of this. a real keeper for sure ... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Hello Pete, thank you for your encouraging review. I did spend some time on this one. That was a mor.. read more
‘fossils flung far in shifting swell
beached upon dampened sand’

Love it
Great work Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Many thanks Julie for your encouraging review. Be sure to have a good weekend.

Chris.. read more
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Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

1 Year Ago

You too
Thanks Chris
Enjoy your Saturday
To me this sounded like a hunt for seashells along a deserted coastline. Either way I enjoyed it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you will. It was hunting for fossils thrown on to a beach in Dorset after a storm. We had rich.. read more
Lovely write and images flow through your words, hurled through rough salty waters from oceans dark disturbed bed. I saw so much just within these words. ;-]. Nicely expressed.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you Weeping willow for your visit and kind encouraging review. Have a great day.

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Chris Shaw

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Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..

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