I Should Have

I should have risen early
when the sunlight blessed the water
when the clouds were driven westward
on a breezy blue sky morn

I should have seen the willows
on the crowded banks a swaying
while the geese and ducks were dozing
in the river's flow at dawn

I was oh so far away though
I was floating in the heavens
I was chasing silver moonbeams
I was dancing with the spirits
I was ageless newly born

I saw the comet's soaring
through the darkened night time velvet
I was mesmerised by brightness
with a feeling I was weightless

while the clock had long stopped ticking
there was nothing I was missing
I was taken I was yearning
there is nothing here to mourn

Reviews

[Carola]

hi chris
another wonderful piece of penmanship.
you probably had a vivid dream. on waking, lucky that you remembered the images & turned them into words.
cheerio carola
ps love the idea of weightlessness, my daily aspiration, but I need a mouth zipper!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks carola, I was certainly in and out of dreams. Pleased for all your encouragement and support.

Chris

[Neville]

there are lots of things we all should have done .. but the time you should have done some of them, or could have, was not at all wasted if just a few moments were spent crafting poetry of this calibre .. ink well spilt and then poemed to perfection our Chris ... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Aw, thanks for the encouragement Neville. Know you are appreciated big time.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

thank goodness you will have other times to savour the early morning across the water.

Sleeping in late often leaves you fuzzy for the rest of the day..

[Chris Shaw]

Stella, I am six months late here with my thank you. Better late than never. A sorry in order here :) Have a good day.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

lol, well it has given me the opportunity to read this lovely poem all over again, so not to worry Chris ... :)

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a beautiful tribute to the beauty and wonder of nature, and the power of the natural world to inspire and uplift us. The use of vivid imagery and sensory details is particularly effective, with the "sunlight blessed water" and "crowded banks a swaying" creating a vivid and immersive experience for the reader. The idea of being transported to another realm through the beauty of nature is emphasized throughout, with the speaker finding new appreciation for the natural world and the lessons it has to offer. The final lines of the poem are particularly poignant, with the speaker finding a sense of peace and contentment in their connection to the natural world. Overall, your poem is a beautiful and uplifting tribute to the power of nature and the human spirit. Well done!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your comprehensive review.

Chris

[Lorry]

Yes, but you didn't! And why didn't you? Because you live in the UK.
Now before everyone starts throwing hash tags my way, don't... Because they're really pointy and could take an eye out!
But only a brit, which I was about to call a Ukanian, but thought it might confuse people, could understand losing yourself in a dream, when you know that when you wake, it will be something that rhymes with missing it down, despite most of Europe and a large chunk of the rest of the world bursting into flames in a most inappropriate way indeed!
We are the only country where summer lasts a week at best and everyone else is spontaneously combusting, we get out the shorts and barbie if it goes beyond 18 degrees. Then get a sunburn and moan about it for a month!
So you just stay in dreamland and remember, we all look weird in bikinis with wellies! 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Well we certainly don’t have the temperatures that everyone else seems

[Chris Shaw]

to be having at the moment and we have certainly had plenty of rain. This is an old poem so I can’t even remember what inspired this one Lorry. I must have been on the river though, for sure. Hope your Thursday has been a good one and thanks for stopping by.

Chris

[red93]

Rebirth can come from difficult situations and free the Spirit for further growth - good to see you getting above it all dear Chris and flying with your Muse.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tony. Back home after a short break. Hope you are doing OK my friend and that Tuesday and all days treat you kindly.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

A lovely penned piece deeply expressed letting go and freely flying Imaginations
realm , weightless in time and space
Nice work

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Fran. Glad you liked this piece and pleased you stopped by. Happy Tuesday.

Chris

[Stuart Munro]

This is a Beautiful poem , it took me there , well done Chris

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Stuart, I appreciate you stopping by. All good wishes.

Chris

[Stuart Munro]

Chris it’s a poetic pleasure to read your works

[Chris Shaw]

Aw, you got me blushing :)

[Betty Hermelee]

A beautiful piece about the mind letting go, not us should have, but let my mind be what it wants to be, and if I miss a willow tree swaying, we’ll test just too bad, because I was flying high, letting imagination take me where it please, time means nothing to me now, nothing to mourn.
Beautiful write Chris.
Best to you
B.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty for stopping by to share your thoughts. Pleased you enjoyed the read. All the best.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Chris, take care
Best, B

[Alan S Jeeves]

Chris, I have to say that this is my favourite piece of yours I have thus far enjoyed. Just right in quatrains with a sandwiched pentastich. I guess I should have risen early in order to have read it sooooner.
Is it an epitaph ? that, of course, is for the reader to decide - after all, beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
I think, Chris, that you DID see all these things.
Kind regards, Alan

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Alan thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. Pleased this is a fav now. To be honest I was half in and out of sleep. Yes I did see it all though at some point. Not intended as an epitaph, but if the reader wants to interpret that way, then I am happy with it. Hope you have had a good Saturday. Will pay you a visit soon.

Chris