On The Marina Lake

a layer of ice
sees a swan stumble and skid
slip sliding away

Reviews

[Perdition]

Actually could go into so many aspects of this one as far as it lapping over into metaphor but I won't. The layers show even when the holiest of holies, those white-suited angels from every aspect of water, once they touch down onto the truth, well, even they must deal.
Brilliant and I would love so to expand but not going to...lol. Thanks!~

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Perdition. It was a first seeing a creature of such grace and elegance stumble. That thirty seconds covered many emotions including humour. Composure regained very swiftly. Our species has much to learn from the natural world.

[Shelley Warner]

Short, sweet, and descriptive. You bring nature to life.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Shelley for your visit. Have a good Thursday.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I love the haiku, the visuals overall, and the smile that the last line delivered. Great job!

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Linda. Pleased to say the swan regained its composure pretty quickly.

[Soren]

A vivid image of nature at her best. Nature has a sense of humor too. A great Haiku

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren. Yes nature does have a sense of humour. Pleased to say the swan regained composure and elegance quickly :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I so enjoyed this poem and the last stanza really brought back some memories. A song by Paul Simon called Slip sliding Away. One of my favorites of his because it's such a haunting tune. A nice poem Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Carlos and for noticing the reference to Paul Simon. Pleased you enjoyed this haiku. Nature provides us with much to write about.

[Stella Armour]

An unusual image Chris, always sad to see elegance brought down.

I love haiku that paints pictures in my mind's eye...

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella. Yes it was unusual to see a situation where a swan was far from elegant. Reminded me of a very well dressed lady I saw once who got her high heel stuck in a pavement and very nearly went flying. Have a good weekend.

[Stella Armour]

haha, and Charles revealing a hole in his sock .... oooh that did make me laugh:))

[John the Baptist]

Slip sliding away? Makes me think of an old rock song. No one ever shows something like this happening on the nature shows. We like to think swans have more dignity.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John. Slip sliding away is a nod to Paul Simon. Unusual to see a swan other than graceful and elegant, but it happens.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I got a visual out of this one! Fabulous to do that with just a few words. It reminds me of the Canada geese we saw on the lawn of the doctor's office. My little girl and I did the "goose walk" with them until they went back across the road. Great job on this.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased the imagery came through Fabian. Ungainly it was but the swan recovered quick enough. Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

This sounded like a beginning of a wonderful song. Few more lines and it will be an awesome one.
I love it.

[Chris Shaw]

A little haiku with a nod to a song Sami. I appreciate your thoughts. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome Christine.

[willweb]

That is actually a funny picture to see in the mind. Cute Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

It was amusing to watch. Swans are usually so elegant:) Thank you will.

Chris