You are...

You are...

You are a diamond blooming in the heavens;

A tangible source of everlasting love.

You feed on what is below and above.

You curl yourself in times of weakness,

Around  gallant poles stuck not within holes;

You roam through sea's skies and meadows.

You bow to all who cross you;

A courteous defeat surrounds you.

You are the epitome of self righteousness.

You shadow the beauty in the world;

An apprentice of love and courage.

You are moonlight in the palm of my hands.

You are the dance that has not been danced;

A step or two in the right direction.

Your smile is at least infectious.

You stay inside and play outside;

You see the evil like the good would.

You unfold mysteries linking life and death.

You are rain upon a rainbow;

A piece of the puzzle of life.

You interrupt anger and summon bliss.

You collide with the stars out your window.

You form approximate innuendos.

You glisten with diamonds around you-

While the sun shines behind you-

You levitate with open arms;

I've seen your gentle charm.

You are,

Simply magnetic;

Your fields green and abundant.

You are,

Overly beautiful.

Your eyes a world for one to see into.

You are...

Everything.

Chris Holmberg

Author's Note

I think I am in love...

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

much advice you're given here! but remember this:

the artistic value of any poem, song, story etc is determined by a few simple things-

1. How real is it to the reader? How much does it invite the reader to participate or contribute to it from their own reality, ideas etc?
2. Does it have adequate technique to produce an emotional impact?

And really, that is about all! There really is NO set rules about how it has to be done. Individual people like whatever THEY like...it can be in perfect meter and rhyme or it can be in total freestyle non-rhyming UNmetered clubfooted anomaly and be a stunner!

I thought your piece was AWESOME! It communicates purely and has great impact and is metaphorically fresh and lacking in "cliche" sentiment.

VERY WELL DONE!

[Alicia™]

This is so beautiful! I agree with Bradley - you are so obviously smitten. I'm sure that special someone will love reading this so much. The emotion behind this poem is shows clearly, and that's what makes it so good. Great job!

[Brad]

you are definitely smitten, my new friend, just in time too, eh?

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Absolutely amazing!

[Sunflower 20]

lol, i think your in love too. this poem is very, very sweet and majestic. it flows really well and i absolutely love the ending:

You are...
Everything.

so sweet! ^_^

[Matt Shriver]

Wonderful. And perfect timing with tomorrow's holiday. Very deep with emotion. Descriptive and well written. True talent here. You are lucky to have such a love interest to create such raw inspiration. Truly well done.

[Jonathan]

I am pretty sure You are, because you can only write about
what you know right? Over all good job writing this poem.
I enjoy reading love poems, but they have to be good.