A Walk through my Mind

Come with me take a walk through my mind

Tell me what you see, tell me what you find

Close your eyes, rest your mind with ease

Peaceful, like wind brushing against trees

 

Only when lost in our deepest dreams

Are we able to find what we choose to not see

Soul searching for years with no explanation

Seems like destiny is eternal damnation

 

Far from the truth that we so much desire

Like lighting up the sky with hearts on fire

 

Don’t reach out your hands you must tread alone

Like prying a King from the seat of his throne

Do you see the darkness buried inside? 

The hate and pain that wastes an innocent life

 

Destructive thoughts are hidden by deceitful bliss

Days are wasted when I sit and reminisce

Are you surprised by how dark my thoughts are? 

Surprised how I’ve managed to hide these scars?

Come with me take a walk through my mind

Be careful what you see, erase what you find 

Author's Note

I started working on this a few weeks ago.... forgot all about it and came across today. Let me know what you think.... thanks!

Reviews

[silent poet]

Beautiful!! I loved it. (Only when lost in our deepest dreams
Are we able to find what we choose to not see) I agree!! and oh how fast your thoughts changed, that I didn't expect it went from light to darkness, from feel to fear to unsettling peace. (my perception). acceptance in what may be but lovely in a way with ease through ur mind.. I LOVE THIS , great work Aaron.. :) Aarons dark wonderland. (be careful what you see, erase what you find)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... it's an older write but one of my favorites that I have done. I am glad you liked it :)

[silent poet]

very much so and as always a pleasure Aaron!

[McBear]

Very beautiful and deeply written. I enjoyed it. The first few lines reminded me of hopsins "Ill mind of hopsin 1 2 3, ect.. "

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy :)

[ExquisiteEyes]

I just have one word for this poem- BEAUTIFUL!
This one so different and touched my heart. The language used creates a wonderful imagery and flows really well.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you ExquisiteEyes :) Appreciate your comments :)

[ExquisiteEyes]

You're welcome :)

[wordman]

loved the poem aaron,but the thought of walking through your brain,scared the hell out of me..

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks wordman :) It's not that bad lol

[zunie frost]

Wow !! I'm really impressed ! You have got amazing talent there bro !
Love this work :-) lovely poetry :-P 100% ratings from me

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much Zunie :) I am glad you enjoyed it so much :)

[zunie frost]

Yes i did ! Was my pleasure

[Sarah Hampton]

Amazing! You have definitely captured the inner struggle behind the mask, I applaud you!
As for the lines:
'Only when lost in our deepest dreams
Are we able to find what we choose to not see'
All I can say about seeing it in black and white is ouch!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Sarah :) Appreciate you taking the time to read and review it :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Cool write my friend:) yeah my thoughts tend to be dark...sometimes very dark. But eh...we gotta hold on to what we got, and give our best shot at tomorrow. i like the poem:) keep it coming.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... this is an older one but one of my personal favorites.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome:) maybe check out some of my new poems when you have the time...i'd really appreciate your opinion.

[Perkele.7885]

Remind me to take a good flash light if I take a walk through your mind and a coil of good rope, a hammer and some carbinaires

[AaronFreitas]

haha will do Perkele... play it safe :)

[Winslow Des Totes]

The last line really sold this piece for me and also how you choose to use the stanza as a way to create pauses without the necessity of punctuation. I especially like how well you brought your subject back around at the last few lines though perhaps I am also too dark but I did not see this as incredibly dark or even really dark, just normal. But hey that's probably because I am quite twisted in my own right but I digress. Very thought provoking piece and well written. Good job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Winslow... dark or not it's me.. it's my life my feelings and the truth. Sometimes it's nice to get that stuff out. I appreciate your comments very much :) Hope to see ya around some more on here :)

[Winslow Des Totes]

Any time and don't worry too much about being dark, some of the best people are! ;) And I thoroughly agree that we must let out our frustrations and our feelings in a creative way otherwise we end up being controlled by them in ways we might not understand till it's too late. Have a good night Aaron.

[alf]

Hi Aaron. Deep, brooding, introspective, questioning, and beneath all that, I sense a kind of surprise at the hurting, as if there was something you should've seen in life, but perhaps did, and didn't want to acknowledge. I heard once, the wider the smile, the deeper the pain!!!! Especially if the smile doesn't fill the eyes. Loved this, dark and subtle soul baring. Great write, alf

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... I like that... "the wider the smile, the deeper the pain." You couldn't have said it any better... I have a pretty big smile haha... thanks buddy appreciate the review!