Looking at the Moon

Looking at the Moon

A Poem by The Invisible Girl

Sometimes I sit alone watching the moon
Thinking about how he'll come real soon

He may not be near
And I know I shed some tears

Because it seems like everybody's got somebody but me...

Lovers saying "I love you"
But all I get are the blues

Waiting for him gets so lonely
But I know he's my one and only

Couples holding hand in the parking lot
Boy, I feel like a twisted knot

It is getting cold outside
I just need him by my side

I hope he looks at the moon
Praying he'll get to me real soon

He may not have found me yet
But he maybe closer I bet

Because everybody's got their somebody like me.

© 2014 The Invisible Girl


Author's Note

The Invisible Girl
Ehh.. Again it is not that good...cuz i tried to make it rhyme while making sense.. Lol..

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There are some minor musicality issues, but, girl, you should never cut yourself short as a poet. Just post and let the readers be the judge. If you feel it, the poems would write themselves. This is tremendously well done. And that refrain just hit way too close to home, as I feel that right now.....and have even when you first posted this. You only need to tweak the musicality a bit (and "hand" should be plural). But other than that, this teems with the feeeeels, and it's amazing. Reminds me of a song I've yet to write but have curiously been meaning to write since 2014, and also that Music Man song:

"Goodnight, my someone,
Goodnight, my love."

Well done! Much enjoyed!

Posted 1 Month Ago


I can feel the emotions and relate to this poem. Beautifully written.

Posted 2 Years Ago


i personally find it really great.
" Lovers saying "I love you"
But all I get are the blues "
my favourite line. really touching in a sense. always be hopeful.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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We all long for this type of companionship. Someone you can just sit with and let time pass. We all look at look at the moon or stare at the sky and hope for that someone. It is our soul longing for that intimate companionship. You did a wonderful job expressing that in your poem. Thanks for sharing. N.

Posted 3 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading
Dont under estimate ya self, its just too good. Honestly, i do write all kinds of poems(well due to fear of having some one plagiarise, mine ones i saved to my G drive www.goo.gl/suts1S ,) but i never get a good ending or rhyme for a l**e poem, but now moon will show me my way. :-)

Keep up ya good work!!!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

4 Years Ago

Thank you!!!
Voo--Whoo ~~ Very intriguing ~~ You so hot ~~
Umm yeah, I enjoyed reading this poem or song whatever it is. Great job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

5 Years Ago

Thank u for reading
The meaning is quite clear for me darlin. I've seen the couples holding hands, laughing together. It's as though life is a movie screen and its always showin me what I want but can't have. Things will come together someday and all those moments of loneliness will be forgotten. You'll see.

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading!! :D
^^^^ best excuse ever. LoL what if your looking at the moon at the same time as your soul mate miles away.

Posted 5 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I understood it and I think it's interesting to use the moon as a connection between souls that haven't met yet. The moon ties us all together in a very power way. Good work

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

5 Years Ago

Thanks!! :)
I like it :) you did a good job :) the moon is so beautiful.. and I can understand why you would want to use it in your poem

Posted 5 Years Ago



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