Open Your Eyes

Open Your Eyes

A Chapter by Cynthia

Let's pull things aside

and open your eyes wide

can't you see

you set my love free

fly to your heart

that's the love of art

love is magical

also musical

music of happiness

don't show your sadness

so just smile

even distance between is miles

please be lover of me

as you can be



© 2010 Cynthia


Author's Note

Cynthia
My first rhyem poem, it may sound strange.
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This is my favorite of yours that I can remember! Good job! My only critique is the penultimate (I love that word!) line, maybe change it to "be a lover to me" or something... I don't know, it's the only part that did not sing to me... :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


awww it's really sweet! good one :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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