dying without a tear

dying without a tear

A Poem by chris' girlfriend

Clenching a knife in my fist,

taking the blade down my wrist

seeing the blood stain the my floor,

from the skin thats being torn

whats the point of keeping my life,

when my only friend is this knife

begining to feel numb without any pian,

my life was just a stupid game

© 2008 chris' girlfriend


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chris' girlfriend
written 11/02/2006

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so glad you're not living this way anymore, it's a sad existence. Excellent piece....which is why I have to point out a few typos cuz they take away from this:
seeing the blood stain the my floor (the or my)
begining to feel numb without any pian (pain)

It's amazing how far we'll go not to feel when the feelings are so bad. I know how you felt when you wrote this, as you know from reading my work. It's short, simple, to the point, and pardon my pun...but it cuts like a knife. Excellent piece!!


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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life sucks most the time...i'm glad that you don't do that anymore, cause you're a good writer!
i liked how you let i know how you felt..it was sad....but sometimes, we need to read sad stuff...

~may

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a good poem, very powerful... Like Celtic Cat said, you have a few typos in here but all in all it was a good piece, your emotions are very well expressed good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thanks goodness that it's not about your present, but your past. It hurts me and confuses m even more that why peopl hurt themselves over others, people who don't even care about them. I think it's foolish...
Not that I'm calling names, it's just my point of view. Even I have felt bad about myself because of some 'others'...
Anyway, the poem is very powerful and too painful. Having such a friends is better that jot having a friend at all. I's good that that phase of your life has passed.
Great Write!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thats something I've felt before.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so glad you're not living this way anymore, it's a sad existence. Excellent piece....which is why I have to point out a few typos cuz they take away from this:
seeing the blood stain the my floor (the or my)
begining to feel numb without any pian (pain)

It's amazing how far we'll go not to feel when the feelings are so bad. I know how you felt when you wrote this, as you know from reading my work. It's short, simple, to the point, and pardon my pun...but it cuts like a knife. Excellent piece!!


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sad, touching, well said.

I felt the sadness and hopelessness.

Good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This plays like the song that carried me for years, and that so many others sing every day. Brilliant and sad and stirring...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow..i like it..its so sad...):

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is good..like it.
keep posting more poems and stories cause I'm dying to read more again from you :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sorry you felt so low. You invited me to contact you when I feel down, I'm returning the invitation. Any time.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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