Is It Written In The Stars?

                                                                                                

 

Everything has become clear

As the midnight sky,

Every star is a piece of the puzzle

 

            Each one a glimmer into my

                        Past, present or future.

 

Before hidden in the clouds of uncertainty

And the bright lights of the cities pain and misery

Now they shine brightly for infinity to see.

 

They light the way through endless

Space of hopes and dreams.

 

Some even connect to make out

The real me for caring eyes to gaze upon.

 

In the end the stars may not have written my destiny

But with so many ablaze in my minds galaxy

The options are  as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed upon.

 

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Well said, I'd like you to consider revising your last sentence Dale, it is a fragment.
The options are as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed upon...
The options are as endless as the sky my eyes are fixed upon.......suggestion.
........as the sky I feast my eyes upon........suggestion.
Beautiful thoughts here.
Helen :-)

[Colleen C Dunphy]

This is incredibly beautiful, and strangely makes me think of the lion king.
Thank you for sharing.

[Janice Ann]

Firstly, wondrous! I loved it. I always think of the stars as the dreams I have had at night...there are so many to recall and they are just there whenever you want to look back or up! LOL. There is a beauty and rare feeling when the stars come out...it is like looking at so many life's at once...I once love this piece!

Love,
Janice Ann

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Every star is a piece of the puzzle
Each one a glimmer into my
Past, present or future.

Beautiful words. This poem seranades my soul with with a twinkle.

Well written, if I may suggest in this line
The options are as endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed on.
(options endless as the skies my eyes are always fixed upon)

I only suggest becuse I think the upon is more poetic and in phrasing it this way you can eliminate the use of my and I in the same sentence.

Love the words used in this piece, beautiful.

[Angelic Darkness]

I really like this poem...makes me feel like I am laying on the
ground looking up at the night sky, and I do like observing.

I really think these stanzas are very powerful...
And the bright lights of the cities pain and misery

Now they shine brightly for infinity to see.

Such imagery there.

In this line I think you need to read over: In the end the may not have written my destiny

It doesn't quite make sense.

The same thing goes for this one: The options are endless as sky I keep my eyes fixed on.

This is a wonderful poem overall. AD

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Once again a beautiful piece from Mr. Rock And Roll Cowboy!!
I love the whole thing!!
I've really love stars so it's really great that someone has incorporated stars into such a beautiful message!!
Great write!!!