Next Prey-er

   

Time to worship again

Lead your flock to the depths of hell.

Here on your scared ground

Lying eyes and snakeskin bites

Are parts of the everyday service.

 

High upon your altar

Looking down on your flock

Each one suffering the consequences

From worshiping your

Cruel temptress preechings.

 

Using sex as false salvation

And deceit as Hail Marys

Then corroding their spirits

In your fountain of debauchery

Disguised as pure holy water.

 

So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.

 

So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

 

 

Reviews

[Belinda Rice]

Wow this is very good I really like this alot you were really stright down to the point and you made in justifyed, You wrote this so farely and true that people suffer from so manything that some times we dont know what to do...God is suposed to be our healer and our father to bring us salvation and peace.We are not suposed to have to take the devils hand that places bad thing on us as we try to live a stong life...We are tested that yet I know through god but he him said we shall not suffer but yet we do..We suffer from to many things proverty emotional pain phycial ,mental and through the illness that the devil places apon us all...right here is what got me
So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.



So sacrifice the virgins

And those not so innocent

But with God as my witness

I will not become your next

PREY-ER!!

cause I will not ever fall to the prayer of the devil or the ones who think that sacrifice the virgins is best for our sins its not God is the one who said if you confess on to me then I shall forgive those who telleth me.You again have written a great piece and I could not have put this toghter better then you have I will rate this one on the most high God lets people recieve the best of all rating when you speake the words of the truth..and here you did so perfectly..ty for being the first one to be able to read this God Bless you and I hope that you become the most greatest writer in the world and I truly mean that I hope that you publish your work and I hope I can have the first signed book....Lots of caring Belinda I also wrote another sex story I know its not the time to tell you this but I did if you would read it I am editing it now ....ty

[Babbette Francis]

Thats what I'm takin bout..... Awesome write here.



So lead them deep into temptation

And deliver them straight to hell

While you worship in the name

Of your beast of burden

That you make others pay for.



It's people like this that give God a bad name-
Awesome piece...................

[---]

Wow very well written and quite frightening as well. Its incredibly creative how you use elements of Christianity and Catholicism to express evil intentions.

Great job!

~Phoenix~

[Lady leah]

Very nicely penned n O so true. tested we are day by day for the things we do here.

[Sheila Kline]

Excellent play on words.........though, I interpret it as a temptress that is the "Prey-er", with religious connotations for comparison....excellent parallel!...a good and bad swap.
To the point.....vivid.......a take heed, I will not become your victim message!
Well done!

[just is]

Whoa! This is straight forward and to the point. Wow! I like this one Dale.

[Brette Medb]

The last line was great and it took me until then to understand the name of the poem. I loved this piece, as always you manage to capture my full attention. For me the first few stanzas reminded me of Dante's Inferno but that might just be because of the language and imagery. Great write, as always.


Brette

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I really enjoyed the darkness in this piece mixed with a bit of religion. I thought this was brilliant! Awesome write.

[Dezaraye]

I'm not sure if I really know what all this is about exactly. Your words are full of fire, though, and I could feel the passion and anger behind them.

[Celtic Cat]

haha...good for you for standing your ground! Can I hold onto your ankle to keep myself from falling into the pit??? I'm uh, currently in a handbasket!!
This is a great piece. Temptation is a b***h.... and prayers come in so many forms. Excellent write.

[Lestat's daughter]

I like this one.