Limerick-2

In my effort to make you laugh

A man with different name gear.

His hair sadly caused him fear.

In it lived ten cats.

Two elephants and three bats,

Hundreds of Giraffe and a deer.

Reviews

[Writer #00]

I could see this with a goofy Dr. Seuessian picture attached to it. If you mean the animal deer, it is spelled 'deer' not 'dear'. If not, then I can offer no aid. : ) Light-hearted and simple!

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for letting me know my fault.

I really appreciate it.

Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A slight perfection hugs this piece.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks.

Always love to read your reviews

[Allan W]

Not sure what the first line means? And it would work better if the last word of the first line rhymed with the last word of the last line - obviously gear and bear don't - which for me personally made it dis-jointed. I loved the middle three lines though and the general idea. A bit of tinkering and this could easily be a top notch little limerick.
Thank you for this - it has inspired me to have a go at a limerick now! Good fun!

[Devanshu Rajput]

You took me to right point.

Really these words didn't rhyme.

As per Your advice I amended my write.

With kind regards.

Devanshu

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this ! funny and well written

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks.

With best wishes,

Devanshu

[InsanityWriter]

XD Nicely done. :) I love limericks!

[Devanshu Rajput]

I too love limericks that's why I write them.

Thanks.

Devanshu

[Baby Ricochet]

Better do something about that goddamn bear

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Absolutely implausibly hysterical humor! :) BTW, I'm with Roopal; why are the other animals so less in number?! O_o

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks.

I will take a look soon.

Always love to read reviews by you.

with regards,

Devanshu

[Aehr]

Haha this made me smile :) Nice one :D

[Roopal]

"His hair sadly caused him fear" hehehe.. poor fellow. :D
You can add a few more lines, but still, it made me smile. But all I keep wandering, why 100 giraffes when other animals are so less in number?

A true limerick. :D

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for your words.

I haven't added more lines because Limerick ideally does not allow to add more lines than five.

If you advice then I surely would modify it to make it more interesting.

Thanks.

Devanshu