This is Death

 

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Icy Touch

Blank Face

No Response

Unset Pace

Unbroken Silence 

Serene Eyes

Futile Words

Deceptive Lies

Sanguine Blood

Heart of Lead

Peaceful Countenance

Hatred Bred

Passing Time

Pernicious Night

Apathy

Misleading Light

Free of life

Lack of Breath

Unbeating heart

This is Death

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Reviews

[Mioki]

Hm, this was a unique view on death. Although it wasn't wordy, you were still able to get a reaction from the reader, and it had meaning. Some poems with a lot of words aren't even able to do that, so I give you kudos for getting it in there. This poem also makes the reader feel slightly fearful and cold at the same time. "What is death?" they begin to ask themselves. Well, your poem sounds what I imagine it would be like. This was a very thought enticing piece, I'm glad to have read it.

[Crazy Cat Man]

nice

[M. Amphet Salt]

Excellent rhyme. The meter was abstract, but what about death really isn't; yet however, you did a great job making the flow work. Of cousre with use words such as deception and sanquine blood I am seeing a vampire. And vampire are metaphors synomynous with life and death. Yet this poem is about death it has a life and depth of it's own in a few short words, all undertaking great imagery. You may be able to sale this to the magazine Monsters Next Door, if not check back with me, I have another lying around here.

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

Short, beautiful, wonderful. I loved it! Its so simple, and I like that. Great job!! :)

[DaGirlNxtDoor]

so short but yes SOOOO amazing!!!! luved it!

[Daydreamer21]

I love this poem!!:)

[JC]

beautifully written with a broad perspective. thanks for the friend invite, look forward to reading more

[Dillon Cotter]

short and to the point, it tells a powerful assumption of words followed by a feeling, good work!

[shane]

wow ... thats all i can say !!

[LOVERS CHANCE!]

this is different. i like the poem because it gives me a different look on what you think death is besides my own. i think the poem is well written and straight to the poem. it gave me chills and shivers.

[Domo]

very powerful, and a great poem. Great job and what a great write. Keep up the good work! ☺