This is Death

 

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Icy Touch

Blank Face

No Response

Unset Pace

Unbroken Silence 

Serene Eyes

Futile Words

Deceptive Lies

Sanguine Blood

Heart of Lead

Peaceful Countenance

Hatred Bred

Passing Time

Pernicious Night

Apathy

Misleading Light

Free of life

Lack of Breath

Unbeating heart

This is Death

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Reviews

[Mioki]

Hm, this was a unique view on death. Although it wasn't wordy, you were still able to get a reaction from the reader, and it had meaning. Some poems with a lot of words aren't even able to do that, so I give you kudos for getting it in there. This poem also makes the reader feel slightly fearful and cold at the same time. "What is death?" they begin to ask themselves. Well, your poem sounds what I imagine it would be like. This was a very thought enticing piece, I'm glad to have read it.

[Shayne Plunk]

This is a great poem. Very to the point. Few words per line, which is hard to make sound good, but you worked it well. Very well written, very concise.

[Seeker]

Rhythmic, short and rhyming. Your view of death is quite to the point, but unrushed, in a manner that allows readers to contemplate these words. Good work.

[The Wave]

this is written well and i liked it.
the form of it is unique, but i think thats what made it read better.

you did a good job explaining death except i didnt know how "deceptive lies" came into play with it.
overall though, its enjoyable and you definitely have talent.
good job.

[the nothing]

this was an exelent view of death most attempt to force people to ether embrace it or pospone it a flaw that I relizie in my poem life begon *hint hint* but as I was saying you,you just state simple face many could not do this if they tried a truely exelent poem

[Andrew (not Andy, A.J. ..]

Wow! And you say you're writing sucks. I thought this was really good. Not the typical poetry you get on here, no. Although maybe an emo-like subject it didn't seem emo to me.
Good job! Keep writing!
--Andrew

[ALifeAquatic]

Well done on your contest win, really enjoyed reading this!

[Jeff Bresee]

And sadly... such a death can come long before you die.

Nice write and congrats on winning best poem in the Newbies Contest

[SLAlexander]

Nice . . . pretty much to the point. I like this.

[J.R Schlievert]

Very deep! :) i like it

[Alexander]

Ooooh. Pretty. I'm impressed :) love the imagery
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