I Gave My Heart To A Demon

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I gave my heart to a demon

Not knowing what you would do

I gave my heart to a demon

I gave my heart to you

 

 I Didn’t know what you would say

When you found out I felt this way

And I never though it'd be you

And it's obvious you didn't think it too

 

I gave my heart to a demon

You never gave my yours

I gave my heart to a demon

It's now behind those doors

 

 

But we were both just friends

Is this where that ends

 

My heart's now gone away

And with you it'll stay

 

I gave my heart to a demon

And now I'm just a soul

I gave my heart to a demon

And it's you that makes me whole 

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Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like it. It has a nice rhythm to it. I think its cool the way it is. I think proclaiming that you gave your heart to a demon is what makes it work. I like the use of the phrase because it resets the poem over and over. Its hard to guess whats coming next. I also like the wisdom that once you give your heart away..that person always has a piece of you. You should write philosophy.

[Satellite Heart]

I like the whole idea of it. Nice Work. :)

[H-Jonesy]

hmmm you repeated "i gave my heart to a demon," just a little too much. um i like the concept too keep it up ^^

[Zet]

Nice flow I know the feeling and it never goes away, just have to forget and try to move on as hard as it is.

[Deepshikha]

Uh, I think you repeated "I gave my heart to a demon" a bit too much...other than that, I think it's a very simple, cute poem... [: