A PLACE TO CALL HOME!

A PLACE TO CALL HOME!

A Poem by cimmy wuv xxxooo
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I wan't to finally feel at home!

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I hate the country so much, you don't understand,
Living here for so long, wasn't what I had planed. 
Its so quite, it feels dead here, theres not one sound, 
Nothing here, but trees, local shops, theres nothing around. 

I yearn for the city, the traffic, the noise, the shops, 
Most people, hate it, but I hope it never stops. 
Because when im there at least the world is alive, 
I feel less depressed, and more happy when I arive. 

There's so much to do, many things to see,
When Im out in the city, I feel free. 
Night is even better, oh what a glorious sight, 
The buildings, and the whole city, all alight. 

My style, is fancy its just my taste, its what I like to wear, 
When im in the city, everyone dresses fancy, so I don't have to care.
Walking around like that in my town, I just look out of place, 
I don't fit in here at all, and you can see it on my face. 

When I get a job, and the cash comes rolling my way, 
I'll be out of here in no time, thats all I can say. 
Of to live with the boyfriend, In a place thats close to the city, 
the only thing im taking with me, is my beautiful darling kitty. 

Ill no longer be close to the city just to rome, 
I won't have to go back to the country, I'll finally be home!


© 2015 cimmy wuv xxxooo


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Even with the sadness within it is a reverse of most work. I can understand the reaching for the city and the lights to keep the mind busy. Rather than the quiet, that gives you too many thoughts.

Everyone has to find their comfort spot. Good luck in finding yours. You have found your voice as you write. Well done. keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

thank you very much for your reviews :)



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Lol!! I can't stand city life!! I'm a woods and rivers kinda guy myself!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

Haha thats fair enough everyones different. Thanks for the review :)
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lol. I'm sometimes just bored of the city, and remember the good times spent far away from the pointless flash and noise....and all the strangers. ugh. lol.
but I enjoyed this piece. well penned

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

yer guess some people hate the city as much as I hate the country.
Thanks for your review :)
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8 Years Ago

you're welcome. :)

and yea. but only when I want loneliness ... lol
Even with the sadness within it is a reverse of most work. I can understand the reaching for the city and the lights to keep the mind busy. Rather than the quiet, that gives you too many thoughts.

Everyone has to find their comfort spot. Good luck in finding yours. You have found your voice as you write. Well done. keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

thank you very much for your reviews :)
There is nothing as pleasing and peaceful place as 'home'....I really love the way you have described the little things you love about your hometown and your neighbourhood....No matter where we live or how famous we become our home will always be the best place for us....Melbourne is truly a great place......Wonderful use of words and simplicity....Full ratings my frnd....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

8 Years Ago

Thank you for ur wonderful review :)
I totally know where you're coming from! That strange feeling of homesickness when your at the place you call 'home'. Wish i could love the city as much as you but i'm too accostomed to living in the middle of nowhere! Only thing you should maybe change is the repetition of shops in the fourth line as it breaks the rythme of the poem for me but, hey, it's your writing!x great poem! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much for your review. Glad you could relate in a way :)
If you like nature, the country is the best. If you like people around, the city is the place to be.
I like your poem, I like both country and city living for their own reasons and location makes it possible to enjoy both.
Well Done 8-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

This is very true :)
Thanks for the wonderful review :)
I feel the same way about my city and when I'm away. What city are you referring to? It's a great poem and drips with honesty.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Just the city of Melbourne. In victoria Australia. Thanks for tge review :)
Wow this is a very well written piece, and I'd say you got your point across. Mine is the exact opposite. In the city there is too much noise, traffic and people. It drives me crazy sometimes. I would love to be in the country...but hey if I lived in the country I would probably want to be in this city. Go figure. I honestly love to be outdoors in nature though. My favorite thing to do is get in a boat in the middle of a calm lake and just be at peace. Now that is the life for me. Great poem. Take Care ~Shannan

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Haha my sister is near the city and is like you. Shes wants to be up here i wanna be down there go f.. read more
loverofpoetry7

9 Years Ago

You're welcome have a good day :)
cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

U to. :) :)
second line change planed to planned
in line four when you say trees, and shops, and then nothing i get it but the latter of nothing previously negating the other two obvious things is a mite distracting. suggestion; nothing else around
i´d rather message you with a more complete edit and review but privately so as not to offend. i am interested in the feelings here, very familiar.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

I appreciate your help and feedback. I know im not the best speller, but the way i see it is it was .. read more
Joshua Carl Cruz

9 Years Ago

the grammer is as imortant as punctuation as the syntax as the bones of the poem. you cant build a .. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Everyone's different i guess. No spelling doesnt matter as much to some people unless the mistakes a.. read more
I completely agree with you! I am most certainly a city boy, I enjoy the country
but would not want to live in it:) like you expressed I too feel free in the city
that hustle itself keeps one on there toes, feeling free in the city is not
uncommon! Great piece of work and I pray you will get to live free in the
city of your choice, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

Thanks james. Glad i could relate to it so much. U get this piece :) thanks again.

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cimmy wuv xxxooo
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