it happens every creak of the bed spring

it happens every creak of the bed spring

 

 

the laces of my tennis shoes

undo

as i run back to you in my dreams

and you laugh as i trip into your arms

 

waking as i hit the floor

of posture

hugging my pillow

as if your skin woke me into habit

 

i never really stop running

but you never quite catch me

 

either.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/8/16

Reviews

[SJ Mullins]

You pack a powerful punch in just a few words. A very poignant write, Jacob. I have written similar. I do think this is something many of us have been through, and those of us who have, can most certainly relate. Sometimes, I wish I could forget! :P Nice ink!~

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Suzanna...
j.

[SJ Mullins]

You are most welcome. :)

[Corset]

this has such a cute romantic side that balances with such a sad one, if it's possible to make a person feel two ways simultaneously this is as close as it gets.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Corset.
j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is so full of feeling. Tripping into the arms of the one you love- whether it is a dream or reality- is something everyone would wish for. The ending is amazing. Impressive piece. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Old love haunting...ghosts in the bed springs...I like it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian...

j.

[Ken Simm.]

Wit painted into romance. I can see the pictures and empathise with the moments.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ken...appreciate your visit and words,
j.

[hcarson]

Totally relatable for most of us i should think. Put very simply making it all that more effective, really like, and can relate to this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, h,
j.

[Paul Bell]

This is a tough one, one we've all been through. The mind is so cruel when you can see and feel someone who no longer belongs in your life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Paul...

j.