nature's laces

nature's laces

 

 

a countryside of coloration

our hearts the scenery

golden leaves, the fresh breath of autumn

a bit of passionate mist hanging over mountains

of tree lined emotion,

 

down a worn path

our shoes click in cadence

we blink at the signs 

that alert us of future possibilities

 

hiking the trail of love

backpacks full of promise

we stop for a respite

and then kiss our way

back to that collateral cadence

 

that keeps us walking hand in hand.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/20/16

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Well written piece,
very sweet sentiment,
filled with beautiful imagery,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jamestown...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love is a journey....a glorious one. The colors change and sometimes we trample on the leaves that fall, but we continue to continue. A wonderful metaphor and since today is September 1st, a good one to welcome Autumn. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...
j.

[Paul Bell]

Something great about walking through nature. Especially if it's a slow walk to nowhere. The stolen kiss leads us into the unknown. Maybe this is the first outing, hopefully hoping for more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul...

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

That is a beautiful description of a journey of love. It is really like it. I love this line- "backpacks full of promise" and the ending is exquisitely written as well. The whole piece is like a live show, you can feel what is happening, you can perceive what is happening. Great. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Vatsal.

j.

[ranscan]

I am intrigued by the word play. The use of imagery to carry emotional undercurrents is quite striking. The tempo creates a pulsing, breathing work, there is almost an actual experience of sound. I find the intonation quite effortless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, ranscan...

j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Love's journey is not always smooth. But there will always be chances for reconciliation (and new promises).
Nice piece. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dhaye.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

This seems somehow sad to me. That despite walking on the trail together, it is more of an arrangement. But maybe I am reading more into it than is there. Anyway, glad to catch up. I was gone while you were it seems.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your insights into this.

j.

[RomaJ]

Love is a journey. It is filled with ups and downs. Yet, somehow, manages to replenish and restore itself. Strengthening the bonds along the way. Beautifully written. I love the lush and vibrant imagery in this piece,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Roma...you are kind.

j.

[Sami Khalil]

"hiking the trail of love

backpacks full of promise"

I see the remembrances of past Falls and their back magics and forward promises. Colors do alert us to anticipate many things in accordance with nature's dances. Nothing is lost on the trail of love even the tree lined emotions. You bring a picture perfect to enjoy...:).............

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sami....

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..........................