Black Rainbow

Black Rainbow

 

 

in a cold womb

conscience incubates

there is a balance

of life and death

and decision

and incision

 

and hellos

and goodbyes 

in an instant

 

and then the disappearance

is complete

 

but i could have been.

i really could have been.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/4/2021

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Where we land Jacob. I believe we decide Jacob.
"in a cold womb
conscience incubates
there is a balance
of life and death
and decision
and incision"
I loved the twist of the language. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Jacob.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very Humorous.

Nothing hurts more thanWhy it is over. Been there

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale...I guess the older we get the more often we have "Been there."
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Maybe third time lucky Jacob, I keep getting locked out. This poem packs a huge emotional punch. Termination is not an easy option. I have never known anyone in this situation who hasn't cried, had sleepless nights and suffered a conscience. Only a desperate woman would contemplate this, so I would not pass judgement. Strong poem.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, dear friend,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You are very welcome. Have a good day dear Jacob.

[rew]

my reading is that -this is about abortion
''cold womb''

''i could have been''

with my emphasis in ''could'' & 'then ''been'' = exist

meaning that this in the ''cold womb'' could've achieved existence

and this effect is reinforced by the repetition of that line with the insertion of the yearningly word of '' really ''

so, there is some pause for thought here and the subject is very topical kudos to you for taking this very emotive subject on.

regards from rew

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and understanding review, rew,
j.

[barleygirl]

11,500 of our fellow Americans died of covid in the last 3 days, so what's a few embryos tossed onto the funeral pyre? Altho your poem appears to convey a distinct anti-choice rhetoric (with which I disagree), I see this "death-in-the-womb" as being the dead-upon-arrival status of our freedoms & basic humanity in the past 4 years, culminating in these particularly intense times (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Margie...
I appreciate your thoughts on this piece.
Actually, I am and always have been pro-choice, myself.
j.

[Stella Armour]

Regrets ... we all have them; what we could have been ...
Black Rainbow, what a wonderful description. Almost like dying embers from a glorious fire....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Stella,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

strikes to the heart of me jacob ... if one can not confess the sanctity of life; and defend it .. what have we become? ... a somber, sharp commentary .. precise with clear, strong progression of a story ... and ... great title sir! that's what i think anyway ... i really like this one ..
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, what have we become?
thank you for your words, E.
j.