Ten

Ten

her allure

caused a leer

shadow boxing eyes

swooped to the center of her ring

she casually threw a glance to the gut

he stumbled

her lips bled "I love you"

in silent count

and he went down for it.

erin-cilberto

6/24/2021

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

There are indeed many less pleasant ways to be punched out. Some knockouts are definitely not technical ones.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, John, so true.

[Laz K.]

A great metaphor!
We get in that ring to fight but against an opponent such as the one described in this poem we always lose.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Laz.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Oooh this
one piece has
nice metaphor
am liking the
double entendre
here ..

as always Jacob
so well penned
and expressed;

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

A great metaphor ….a lively love tryst…sensual, desirous, an at the end they both landed down on the count of ten, , but on the bed….
Very clever J….
Always
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Betty,
j.

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Really enjoyed the double meaning in your words, thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, R.J.
j.

[Weeping willow]

Nicely expressed piece, Love the flow of words ;-]

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, willow.
j.

[Kerra]

Wow, this is really good, Love this write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Kerra,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A beautiful woman can make men swoon...and forget what they were about to do. More heady than a potent potable, yup. To be such a woman is to be fortunate in life. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh those potent potables...
thanks, Lydi,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

And no cut man in the corner to razor the eye lids.

"Cut me Mick..."

Ah but she did it too well and the bruises spread like wildfire.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Yo Adrian, I did it" and Pauly saying to Apollo "he's not getting killed, he's getting mad"
yes, the bruises do spread....you have a sharp mind my friend...love your reviews, always.
thanks,
j.