Adult

Adult

 

 

I'm growing up now

it's a feint procedure

like ducking right hooks

from an inconsiderate champion

 

who left me sitting in my corner

imagining a next round

but all I got

was 

served a few drinks

and a summons

 

that the bar was closing

and I was way past my prime.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/2/22

Reviews

[Lathen Griffiths]

An enjoyable and witty read here Jacob, keep ducking those right hooks. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lathen,
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

I'm beginning to think you spend a lot of time in bars. Spilling wine and now you're getting into bar brawls. Hopefully your words got the best of his words. I noticed your maturity grew as the reviews came in. 12, then 14. Don't grow up to fast. You might meet your death

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is funny, Bill. I never go to bars anymore and hardly used to...not much of a drinker ever.
read morethat is funny, Bill. I never go to bars anymore and hardly used to...not much of a drinker ever.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

Just write of it then. Maybe the write creates the experience. Sounds safer anyways.

[Chris Shaw]

You know when I was six, I used to count on my fingers how long it would be till I was twelve. Twelve was so grown up, so old. These days I hanker after childhood. Oh to be a kid with no responsibilities. The longer you put off being an adult, the better in my opinion. My inner child comes out to play regularly. That's where I wandered after reading your lines J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I feel like my maturity level is 12.
Thank you for your words and that share, Chris,
j.

[Blue]

I felt like this soon after my 18th birthday. Now that I'm 26, I'm still not at peace with growing older. Haha. I'm haunted by the idea that the best years of my life are already behind me. Aging gracefully is something I have yet to learn. Hugs to you, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Blue,
you have many years and much poetry to write....
If your best years are behind you, where are they for me at 71? :)))))

[andrew mitchell]

Often think an adult is just a child getting older and sometimes we are just a shell when we lose the child in us..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I still feel like I am 14 most of the time...and I have the maturity of a seven year old.
thanks, andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

Lol you’re a wise 7 year old.

[M. J. Smith]

Too many nights in a barstool ages men prematurely. Give me a summer night by a campfire any day. Lonely words, my friend. Lonely words...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Campfires are just mesmerizing...thank you for your words M.J.
j.

[M. J. Smith]

You're welcome, my friend.

[JE Falcon]

I have the image in my head, I have a half-empty drink and the car keys on the bar in front of me, then Gary, the bartender, says, "..........?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Get a taxi for this guy"
Thanks, JE....I probably would not have made it home.
j.

[DIVYA]

Hey wait! It's not yet time!
If we had our way, the rounds would never end and there'd be always some growing up left to do.
Sadly, the Great Adult above doesn't leave it to us kids to decide our bedtime.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Your last line is a great way to put it...yes, he does not leave it to us.
thank you, DIVYA,
j.

[DIVYA]

Its such a pleasure, my friend. :)

[h d e rushin]

There is something noble about prize fighting. "Sometimes the fear of it comes to warm the room", Mike Tyson said. And yet even in defeat, there is a certain formality about getting knocked out by someone (or something) much stronger. Perhaps even something elaborately ceremonious about living to fight another round. Father time is both undisputed and undefeated , Great analogy to life by my friend. Just fabulous.....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't even think Ali could beat Father time...well, he didn't...that damn Parkinson's...
read moreI don't even think Ali could beat Father time...well, he didn't...that damn Parkinson's...

He will always be one of my heroes.
thank you for your words on this poem, dana.
You are a kind, giving poet.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

I would have tripped the bar owner….for telling you your past your prime… what does know about you? I loved the part about the the right hooks and sitting in your corner… aging is all in the mind… and when that happens it’s nobody’s business… have a few more drinks in me….
Best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Betty,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and I never told my trainer to throw in the white towel....I still had fight left. And do, hopefully.