her fly

her fly

 

 

tarantula breath

she's so close

wicked kiss

poison

constricted longing

only her spider arms 

can hold me

flush

 

crawling flesh

succumbs

she is beautiful

her web is my comfort.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/16/22

Reviews

[lightsong]

Not fair to speak about us women like that, not all of us are the same ;> sill I can't blame men some temptations are out of control aren't they? on another hand as I read your words here I think of jealously to the extreme that "she" would kill him instead of letting him go to another one, the SCARIEST version of faithfulness LOL. your imagination goes sometimes beyond written words Mr. J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like where you took this, lightsong...
thank you,
j.

[M. J. Smith]

Never trust a beautiful woman! Or a female politician..
Just joking. Badly, I may add. A strange little play on the spider and the fly. Kinda makes me think of addiction. Well written, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and yes, my mind was going in that direction as well...
we often write with multiple meanings drifting in at once.
thank you
j.

[Patricia]

I do love the images this conjures up. The last two lines are surprising and awesome, didn’t see them coming. Great piece j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Patricia, I appreciate your kind review,
j.

[Patricia]

you're welcome

[Zoe Richardson]

Oh, we are the deadliest of the species, aren't we? And yet the male seems all to willing (even eager) to be devoured. There are consequences to love, to flight, to curiosity. Sometimes those consequences are a sticky web and empty veins. Love the imagery here. And the feeling of impending doom!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insightful review....thanks, Zoe,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man!! such an illness ... that love and loss of senses allow a woman to ensnare a man ... a fly in her web ... to toy with and he, drunk on the vamps bite .. really like this ... ah if I were younger with boys still to raise I would read them this warning poem .. super good stuff brother!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I guess it might serve as a warning...ha ha...thanks E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i have not been caught so haplessly me self .. but deserved to be ... honestly speaking :}

[Kelly Scheppers]

Ok, I had a much different perception. Don't laugh, but judging from the title, I thought it was going to be about a women's jeans. I think I prefer my mental image to tarantula breath and spider arms...but hey, the mind is a terrible thing to waste! ; )

[Einstein Noodle]

sorry for butting in Legs! but that is the same thing I thought upon reading the title ... pretty good hook eh!? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I figured the title to be taken that way...
and yes, Kelly, the mind is that.
thanks for the smile,
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You're so welcomed, Jacob. (How funny, Gene!)

[John the Baptist]

The old spider and the fly story. Not until it's too late do men realize testosterone can kill you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely, John....
thank you,
j.

[Fran Marie]

said the fly to the spider
I'm your's.".be afraid very afraid"
wrapped up in her web
well crafted piece of brevity...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wednesday said that in Addam's Family Values...
what do you say to the new nanny, Wednesday...
"be afraid, be very afraid..."
thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Fran Marie]

haha yea..and Gene Davis
said it in the movie The Fly

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Gena was quite good in that remake, as well as Jeff Goldblum ....

[Dave Brown]

If she has more than two eyes and long hairy legs, I think you're in trouble

[jacob erin-cilberto]

aww, the legs aren't that hairy...
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

If she asks you into her parlor you shouldn't go. Mary Howitt warned us against such invitations. This poem reads like a modern echo of her work. It's always a pleasure to read your words. I enjoyed. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fabian,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I wonder if any future reviewers will look up Mary Howitt. I just finished "Selections from Browning". "The Last Ride Together" was a favorite for me. I especially love the part where he addresses the poet. I had just finished a book by EBB titled Mrs. Browning. I enjoyed both. How wonderful it would have been to have spent an afternoon with her and her husband.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and what a scary poem to read to children...
but we are impressionable when young, aren't we?

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Just look at the fairy tales; Red Riding Hood (a little girl attacked and eaten by a wolf) Hansel and Gretel, (two small children almost cannibalized by a wicked witch) Three Little Pigs etc. But I think the underlying aspect in all these tales is to gently introduce children to the idea of imaginary monsters to prepare them for the real monsters and the real threats that abound in our world. I remember a quote from an episode of "Criminal Minds" where the psychologist says, "Yes, monsters are real but they have human faces."