disappearance

disappearance

staring into yesterday

hypnotically focused

on how we touched

minds, hearts

lips

bonded

adhesive passion

eloquent arousal of adolescent query

our world moving so fast

we outran each other's dreams

the answers slept with us

and then were gone by morning.

erin-cilberto

3/30/23

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes they do Jacob.
"we outran each other's dreams
the answers slept with us
and then were gone by morning"
I know the above lines. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and then when we really get older, we stop running.
thanks, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right Jacob. I still can fast-walk and you are welcome Jacob.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

"We outran each other's dreams." Love this line! The spark of youth promises so much. For all its prismatic shine, the bubble bursts; and we are left saturated with the memories. Well penned, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Linda Marie,
j.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

eloquent arousal of adolescent query
our world moving so fast

we outran each other's dreams
the answers slept with us

and then were gone by morning.
Well Done!
these lines make the poem great....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jerome,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I still dream in colors that paint a scene out of a Novel … now sleeping on a Shelf… your poetry has me dazzled. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Pat...

[Chris Shaw]

Youth and all the hope of young love. Some like a flash in a teflon pan. Others stuck when it would gave been better they hadn’t. Where are our disappeared dreams now and what are they doing? How quickly the years pass. I look back and confess I wouldn’t want to be back there now.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wonder what it would be like to be back there knowing then what we do now...Glen Close said it best in The Natural...."I think we have two lives, the one we learn from and the one we live with it after that.
thanks, Chris,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

If I was back there now I would know that kindness is ace. Looks are pretty irrelevant in the overall picture.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Kindness...
that is the person you are, Chris.

[M]

I turn thirty this year and even I sometimes feel like my youth was like a one night stand....full of moments of dazzling brilliance, plenty of adolescent query, hopes and dreams....and then it was just gone and now I am left laying in the crumpled sheets as I look towards the middle ages. Life does move so fast and seems to get faster as we age. Poetry like this allows us to look back with a smile even if those days have disappeared forever. Such a bittersweet musing. I felt the longing in every line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, it does get faster...I remember as a little kid that the days seemed to never end. Thank you, Makhabat.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think you have a poetic line for a poem there..."feels like my youth was like a one night stand"--love it.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Reliving adolescence via memory doesn’t seem to clarify the butter. The cake still comes out confused.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the icing disappeared.
thanks, Winston,
j.

[willweb]

Sounds like a wild night to me. Love at times comes and goes quickly and other times it hangs around forever. Nice one my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nicer when it hangs around...a least for awhile.
thank you, will,
j.

[DIVYA]

the answers slept with us
and then were gone by morning.

What a brilliant line! I loved it. You create such a perfect memory of the innocence and naivete of youth. Simply beautiful to read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, divya,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

How well this touches those moments of young lovve ... the excitement ... the heartache ... the amazement that it all passed so quickly ... and now we sit looking back through our old age and wondering what happened.

I like this one j. Thanks for the memories

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for YOUR words, Ted,
j.