love, hurt and good rain

love, hurt and good rain

 

 

 

goodbyes are intermittent 

showers

postponing affection

till the clouds are removed from the field

of play

and

 

love resumes

albeit a shortened game

 

infinity has too many pitching changes anyway

and the glove fits only so long

and then blisters

 

cause the heart to be thrown off

praying for a shower

 

so affection has the opportunity

to fester once again.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/22/24

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Yet another inspiring metaphor. Rain nurtures the flowers so they can bloom. Without it, they won’t survive. Love needs nurturing too. There will be dry spells and then revival. That is often the way on our journey through life. We win some, we lose some. Beautiful thoughts J, though somewhat sad.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[JD Major]

Uncanny, haunting. a moving and wistful depiction of love's span.
JD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, JD,
j.

[June bug]

Such a deep write here, I can feel your words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, June bug,
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

Very deep but true revelations of life and love just the way it is, and always shall be ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Marve,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Alas, we are no longer the boys of summer but the game goes on. I enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian...ah, the Boys of Summer...those old Brooklyn Dodgers.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

I wish the spectators, the fans can fill stadium to watch our games we play; we could be rich...but, alas, the rain dampens the chances, the storms move on to another chance.
An excellent metaphor . Too many lines to quote.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and too many lines for concessions...thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome sir Jacob.

[Ana Papaya]

Love as a baseball game, with goodbyes like rain delays, longing for affection to return despite challenges - I really like the metaphors used.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Papaya, for your kind words,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Seems love is not always on the winning side, jacob.. and that's only too true. Your ability to write briefly but succinctly, with a superb use of every-day your way metaphors, amazes me!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I try to make the uninteresting interesting...and I appreciate what you said very much, em.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

This is so true of relationships...certainty it is not a smooth line...there are always bumps along the way...I like your metaphors, always J....
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Betty.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome J
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. Powerful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas,
j.