invitee

invitee

let us party

we will dip our bullets

into a crowd

wipe the blood off our chins

with our fancy napkins

have someone put the bodies in the trash

share a smoke

crack a few jokes

sleep off the hangover

and tomorrow,

not remember a thing that happened

or how we got home.

erin-cilberto

7/14/24

Reviews

[nadia dmitri]

let us party
we will dip our bullets
into a crowd

I love when writers take a figure of speech (here I am assuming it is "sweating bullets") and use parts of it to make such a loaded and witty and interesting line. Amazing work as always :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like where you took those lines, thank you, nadia,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Sadly we live in violent times and currently democracy is under real threat. Guns are a real problem, but then so are knives. Sickened by the constant killings. Strong write J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for your understanding words, Chris,
j.

[Desert Knave]

Wow. A lot of bad energy around today and this kind of speaks its name. Seems like "democracy" our way is kind of losing its momentum. Anyhow, interesting write. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, losing its momentum...thank you, Jim,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

There were a lot of kids in that crowd of over thirty thousand. I doubt any of them were getting drunk or smoking but I likewise doubt any of those kids will ever forget it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian...not specific to that event...but so many of the shootings over the past years.read morethank you, Fabian...not specific to that event...but so many of the shootings over the past years.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It's just sad that some people always resort to violence to get their way. If we didn't have guns they'd be killing each other with knives, spears, arrows and stones. The Chinese in San Francisco and other areas once had an organized crime assassin cult called the Tong who were called hatchet men or highbinders because they killed with handheld axes. These multiple murders were the main reason for the anti-Asian sentiments directly following the Civil War, along with prostitution, gambling and opium sales. But one vice usually preceded the other.

[Sapphus]

The parties are becoming an everyday thing. Am sad we don't even remember how many.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, they are, Sapphus, and how unfortunate.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

A Shakespearean Tragedy… 🎭 that plays ruthless and reckless with only Prayers ascending for a brighter Day… Amen 🙏 Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, a brighter day...please?

thanks, Pat,
j.

[Soren]

grim and gripping a metaphor of darkness. So true is what makes it so dark. Human history is full of one's benefit from the miseries of others. Bob Dylan wrote Masters of War in this same tone. As always I love your work and bow to your mastery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Soren,
j.

[Fairy Khan]

The writing contrasts casual party activities with violent imagery, highlighting a dark satire on society's desensitization to violence. The indifferent attitude towards serious events, culminating in forgetfulness, underscores a critique of societal apathy. It's a powerful, provocative piece that challenged me to reflect on serious issues through its stark, unsettling imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, Fairy,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

It's man thing, jacob! Not speaking too loudly, am I.. know the head must be pounding. Finely voiced, tongue in cheek wit!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your understanding words, em,
j.