A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

By: Ethan West

Fire awakens what hate could not

Forever lost in tattered creed

And beauty's soul in anger's rot

Is left one final, tender plea

I came upon her in brightest light

My heart was blank, my soul was cold

Struggling with bitter fight

Struggling with darkness bold

And in six words my heart felt rest

My mind as restless as a bee

My heart then put my mind to test

As I outstretched my hand to thee

But her mind is dark like mine

As if to bathe in irony

She sees herself in dark decline

But all there is is light to me

And so, alone, we share this fate

We are two beautiful things to be

Two souls divine, but full of hate

Two hypocrites bound to what they see

And the broken line that cleans our slate

But ah alas, I am the dark

Even though this, you say to me

That I am the light within your eyes

What a beautiful thing for us to see

Author's Note

Not sure if I like the title... But hey! What can ya do?

Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Beautiful writing, this is awesome. Dark and enchanting.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Irvette Dauphine]

i like this.. i though 'maybe this is awesome'
yea this is awesome
dark but beautiful

[ewest1220]

Thanks my friend! I'm thrilled that you like my work! Thanks for reading!

[Thomas Reilly Thornhill]

My favourite line is "as if to bathe in irony" very good again well done

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Tattered Teddy]

Nice. I LOVE the title. actually. The symbolism is so very entrancing, I had to read this twice to take it all in.

[ewest1220]

Wow! I'm really thrilled you enjoyed my work thank you again for reading!

[T. Logan]

I love the line 'my mind as restless as a bee'. I'm always thinking, so this fits. Another good poem!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Rhea752]

i like the title. it's really good and suitably matches the poem.

Fire awakens what hate could not
Forever lost in tattered creed
And beauty's soul in anger's rot

i love these first 3 lines. it sucked me into the poem right away. great job!!! keep writing!!! :)

[ewest1220]

I will :) I'm really glad you liked it thank you so much for reading!

[Rhea752]

thank you for posting it and sending the read request :P

[Coyote Poetry]

"Two hypocrites bound to what they see
And the broken line that cleans our slate'
Sometime people fall together and can find peace and beauty. I like the journey you took me with your words. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[ewest1220]

Wow thank you so much I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

[Hatchling]

This is wonderful!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Pax]

i love the title, it gives life to your poem. good job

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I think the title has earned it's place I'm going to keep it. I'm really glad you liked it!

[Maria1985]

The title actually does go with the poem seeing it from my point of view. Good name. It was so intense yet I like it, well written and very "out-there".

[ewest1220]

"Out there" lol hopefully that's a good thing ;) I'm glad you liked it thank you so much for reading my work!

[Maria1985]

Yes it is. Very hard to describe it so those were the only words I could come up with