Sparrows

What craft is to be used

For painting the sparrows

Such lovely and beautiful?

Unified and serene,

With a tinge of white,

Adorable Lilliputs

With keen attention and sharp eyes.

Do nOt take into account the count,

Three,four or five.

Just admire their spirit

Which resides in those brittle wings.

For one flap means a good flight,

And one nest means a home to many.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading:)

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

Well done! I like how beautiful poetry makes nature extra lovely. The last two lines are epic, they brought to my heart an optimistic feeling.

[fattycbreezy52]

Thanks a lot:)

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome ^_^

[Einstein Noodle]

oh the lowly Sparrow!!!!! :) well done .. serene and gracious thoughts provoked .. third line i would change to "So ... " or "Such loveliness and beauty ...." ;) your first line (for me) entertains some sorcery involved! .. so my mind is hooked as i do watch ghost hunters and other such things :00 I don't like sparrows ..i simply don't ... little buggers that get the best of great owls and eagles and hawks .. never mind the number indeed!! ;) i think you are not playing fair inducing "Lilliputs" ..but must say i love it!! certainly is the "spirit" that matters after all! really had a good time reading and digesting this sparrow of a poem!
E.

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha..I am glad that I could evoke all those emotions.Thanks a lot E and the ghost hunters? Woww, have a nice time!:):)

[DoormanDan]

This poem has a lovely nature vibe to it, and I really like the picture accompanying it. I noticed a few small typos, nothing that big;

"For painting the sparrows such lovely and beautiful?" I would recommend change "such" to "so", for "such" is a little clumsy.

"Do nOt take into account the count,". You accidentally capitalized the "o" in "not". That's all as far as typos go.

Overall, you've done wonderful job with this piece. Keep up the great work! :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Yeah, I am technically challenged, kind of :D
But I am glad you pointed them out.Thanks for the review Dan:)

[DoormanDan]

No problem. :)

[barleygirl]

I love poems that show us observations about nature & the details you've captured are fresh & unusual, expressed in language that stays away from worn-out descriptions! Good job! I can almost feel these twittering beauties from here!

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha thanks a lot for your appreciation:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem for nature and her beauty. The simple bird, the sparrow, show us gathering of many and joy of flight. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[fattycbreezy52]

thanks for the review,Coyote:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.