Raven Bluff

Raven Bluff

A Poem by Frieda P
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Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included. Hope you enjoy the music as much as I did.

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I flew with the dark raven
   for he was the only one
   who could taste or see
   such  insanely sweet madness in me
   he perched himself right astride
   without cawing a sound
   naught a lecture to take care
Mockingly looming overhead
   he stared me straight in the eye
So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 
   soared within me to new heights
   before we burst into fluid flight 
I took him in languidly 
   hauntingly mysterious elixir
   a cryptic spirit unto himself
Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile
   whilst he prepared me for sin
Knocking back at my door
  to taunt me raving yet afresh
  he sing songs his intoxication into me,
  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous
  raven's song so tastefully contrived


              we sing together,
                           twisted in consumption
                                                   the dark raven in me
                                                                    never judges  


 

© 2013 Frieda P


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Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one.... read more



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Dark and gripping, and beautifully written :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much for reading me KatDarkness, so pleased you like this one, it's actually one I like to.. read more
thats so unique a writing, it was an experience to take the flight with this poem.....................the dark raven ....its always there

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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WILDERNESS

8 Years Ago

you are welcome dear. you are bold ............and i m sure beautiful :)
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Holy cats, now you made my entire day! ;-)
WILDERNESS

8 Years Ago

I m glad I did that , keep smiling.....................
This piece has now, after the fifth read, infused itself in me. I will not sit here and try to conjured up your meaning except to say, we all have this dark intoxicant flowing through our veins, it lives with us and breathes with us and often is us, though in the shadows where it hides, the clouded skies in which it flies, it loves us as we love oursleves.

The first 5 lines of this poem will remain with me always. I can hear it spoken in my head. It is magic and I thank you for that.

I flew with the dark raven
for he was the only one
who could taste or see
such insanely sweet madness in me

I will keep this opening stanza with me and read it wehen I need a friendly voice of encouragement.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

I'll tell you a little secret then, I thought someone would guess, the kimmer in the least, but I ac.. read more
Jack...

8 Years Ago

I wish I was rigth now. Now I have read it and Ican see you subtle meaning showing through. Frieda, .. read more
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

I guess too subtle but at the time I didn't think so, I was sure someone was going to nail it. Than.. read more
I love 'sweet madness in me' and the fact that the dark raven doesn't judge, I love how such an idea is wrapped up in poetry! Beautiful

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much Marri, so glad you liked it. I'm kind of fond of this one myself....and you how how .. read more
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Pax
a fresh new air for the raven's song rhythm... completely distinct in its nature, wonderful in comparison in its ozing metaphors...a mysterious persona hides in a ravens cloak. Great work my friend.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks Pax, muchly appreciated. ;-)
Loved it!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed this one, thanks so much!
Beautiful... Real piece of art. And it's so dark - but if the raven is the only one who understands, then there's no way to resist. Really sublime, love this.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Love the word 'sublime' thanks, glad you enjoyed this one, it was a reach for me...thanks so much fo.. read more
Now this is poetry...pure, sublime, lingering in originality and imagery. Utterly beautiful.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Was looking to read one of yours but seems your account is closed....
TamiViolet

8 Years Ago

Frieda P., Came by to read your gorgeous piece again and happened by your comment... I've been a m.. read more
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Now I'm jazzed beyond over the moon that you'd come back just to read this piece...breathless, I may.. read more
I love this mysterious bird as well. Job well done! :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks Tarry, the music just did it for me! ;-)
Ravens are so interesting dear, I wrote one myself too lately... This piece was dark and mysterious, I loved it, the music is fantastic! It fits totally well with your words.
Thank you for another piece of art Frieda.

- Elisa

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks dearest, not sure I read that one, will have to check it out. This music was so haunting, i.. read more

8 Years Ago

Oh nothing with a rush dear... it's in my second row I guess now....
It is just such an amazi.. read more

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