In Silent Words

Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

Reviews

[s y e]

Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!

[s y e]

Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)

Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P

[Frieda P]

Oh Yay...and yes, the master! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

well answer because you are blonde!

[s y e]

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...

[beautiful dreamer]

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A perfect union of beauty, serenity, imagery and emotion. I love the feeling that this one gave to me. A very powerful and emotional write that was also cool and sweetley serene at the same time. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Love that you 'felt' it Friday, thanks, so happy that you enjoyed this one.

[Jack...]

Friday, so what do you think, didn't the two styles merge nicely? That's what happens when you have an amazing writing partner. \

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Yes, they merge quite nicely :)

[quinfinn]

okay, i see what all the hoopla is about. you two really did it. this is seamless and gorgeous. so ....which one wrote this poem, frack or jieda?

[quinfinn]

you just reminded me of that movie with emilio estevez and mick jagger, "freejack". tongue twister indeed....duh! well done, fellow poets!

[Jack...]

Quinn, let's just say Friejackda. Now say that three times real fast. Thanks so much my friend, this was an absolute joyful experience for me, to be able to write along side one of the best poets I have ever read. I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words.

[Frieda P]

Seriously Jack, that sounds like a variation of the plague or something! Thanks quin...

[quinfinn]

whatever

[Frieda P]

Did you just snap your fingers at me?

[quinfinn]

cheez doodles

[kublakhan27]

Collaborations are fun aren't they? ;P Congrats to you both on a vibrant and imaginative piece...and of course, my heartstrings are always on call for a tug of seasonal imagery ;P

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. It was fun and Frieda made it oh so easy for me. Once I saw her words, like usual, they inspired me to just try and keep up. Thanks again, Glad you liked it.

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure, and yes, she is a muse without question :)

[Frieda P]

Did you say 'we are not amused''? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha no I did not say that Queen Victoria ;P

[Frieda P]

Oh I thought she said 'let them eat cake!' hahahaha Marie just turned over in her grave! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha don't worry, you're still Mrs. R...she's much more fun that those old regal types, and I don't mind following her orders...maybe she'll even feed me cake if I ask nicely? ;P

[Frieda P]

Hide it in a hiding place, where no one ever goes, put it in your pantry with your cupcakes. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

;D

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The descriptive nature of innocence in writing leaves the reader full of cleared resonance, a most stirring intrepid reliance on heavy overturned discription that I felt pulled into a fairytale, well done, good read.

[Jack...]

Thomas, we appreciate your kind words. This was a wonderul project to work on with my amazing friend Frieda. So happy you found something in it that you liked.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your most welcome.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Thomas, love where you went with this...

[marie]

wow!!! this is so lovely:) your words have taken flight within my head:) such passion was put into this piece i can't even put into words how much this piece has stricken me!!:) absolutely amazing!!:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Marie. We are pleased you found this enjoyment in our piece. Frieda and I are very proud of this poem and proud of how it affected you.

[Frieda P]

Wow....amazing review, thanks marie!

[marie]

Thank you both!! This was great!!:)

[TL Boehm]

beautiful, bittersweet and lonely poem. I thoroughly enjoy collaborative efforts as they bring out such different voices in both writers. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much. It was fun to write this with Frieda. I am one of her biggest fans and this was a dream come true for me.

[Frieda P]

Thanks TL, glad you enjoyed this one, Jack is a word wizard.

[DIVYA]

Truely awesome the portrayal of a universe shorn of love. Two great poets have joined to create such a powerful lament, it touches the reader totally. Compliments, Frieda and Jack for this wonderful, soulful, skill full poetry,

[Jack...]

Divya, thank you for you sweet response to this poem. It was a complete thrill for me to write this with such a talented poet as Frieda. Her work always amazes me and to be a part of one of these writes with her was a wonderful experience.

[Frieda P]

So thrilled you enjoyed Divya, it was Jack's idea and an honor to work with him, truthfully, I was a bit nervous since he's the king of rhyme & romance!

[DIVYA]

You are welcome Jack. You are welcome Frieda. You deserve such applause for this amazing collaboration. It was an absolute pleasure to read it. Looking forward to more such writing from you.

[gabrielle]

The longing and expectations for love are vividly painted in this piece. Very touching and poignant piece, Frieda.

[Jack...]

Gabrielle, always you sweet words are appreciated

[Frieda P]

Thanks gabrielle, we worked well as a team, glad you enjoyed it.

[J Todd Underhill]

An intriguing mix of two poetic voices this collaboration is stellar and should be recorded with each poet reading their lines. I did this once with a poet and set some music behind it and it was a gem :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much J. Tood. I know I know I speak for Frieda when I say, we appreciate your kind words. It was a blessing to me to have this chance to work with her as she is one amazing poet. Thanks again.

[J Todd Underhill]

Is she going to call the show this week?

[Jack...]

I have invited her...I think Friday nights are a bit busy for her, but I am keeping my fingers crossed.

[Frieda P]

Hi J Tood, Jack sent me...thanks for the lovely review, heard Jack is a hit, he so deserves it!

[Jack...]

He was inviting you, Frieda.

[J Todd Underhill]

I am inviting you Frieda Jack assures me that you are a great poet, and I would be honored if you shared on this weeks show.

[Frieda P]

You're too kind J Todd, don't think I'll be able to make it, but much appreciate it....