Imagistic Embrace

A metaphorical pause deep within

a space crowded of forbidden fruits

somewhat like your lips before we touched

a bit of shine, and a lick of lust-er

you polished my fantasy quite risque

revelations when the phantom has spoken

no illustrative embraces to shake

mere chimera of my mind's play

unaware, you brazenly materialized

tango'd til dawning of brazen daylight

releasing the angels of confession

around the fire of inconsistent guilt

couldn't live up to the luminous parable

sublime written lines, twisted of darkly fate

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

forbidden fruits
somewhat like your lips before we touched
a bit of shine, and a lick of lust-er
you polished my fantasy quite risque

You know me - I find something and just settle on it....savoring it. Rolling it around - a dog with a ball - nomming it till its slobbery....And today its those lines above - I just like 'em. I do.

[Frieda P]

Gawd I love your reviews, did I tell you that already, thanks, muchly appreciated!

[Kristin Lee]

the fire of inconsistent guilt...now there's a line that stands out. This piece has such rich color and vibrant prose. The lines grip you and make you want to linger in each one. Very well done.

[Frieda P]

Jazzed you liked it Kristin, thanks.

[SteveB]

Brava!

The first four lines here may well be the best thing of yours I have had the pleasure to read. Very nicely done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Steve, much appreciated.

[lee von cleef]

Imprecation " let their table become a snare before them, and their well-being a trap" ( Ps. 69:22)

[Frieda P]

Whatever :-)

[kublakhan27]

As usual, you've left me spellbound with the vividness of your emotions and images...the last line could be an appraisal of your entire catalogue...keep up the great work, spellbinder ;)

[Frieda P]

Are you trying to say I'm twisted Benji? ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha only your words Mrs.R...but a great artist can never be too twisted either ;)

[Pete Langley]

I`ve read this three times. It seems as though your preconceptions of this guy were not lived up to, honey....but it took till dawn to realise. Tangoing all night must be exhausting on the feet. P.

[Frieda P]

Trying to keep you on your toes Pete. ;-)

[Tai Ryens]

That was.. unexpected. I must presume that the 'angels of confession' came out under the influence of alcohol, aha.~
I was entertained. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Yay, unexpected is a good thing in poetry, thanks Tai....

[Another Poet]

Oeh a dark poem. Loveeeee this one.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciate it Random Poet, thanks!

[Another Poet]

your welcome!

[Shaun Payton]

"You polished my fantasy quite risque." Attention grabbing line. Such an embrace may require a confession. Guiltnis inconsistent, some feel it when they should, some when they shouldnt. your mind is a creative well.

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly Shaun.

[Shaun Payton]

You are most welcome Poet Frieda:)

[s y e]

Ooooh, another great write from my favorite pickles! (; Awesome job, you write so well, and come up with new ideas and write them and then BOOM! We have another amazing write, haha.

Loved it.

~ Noodle.

[Frieda P]

HA my first Boom me thinks! ;-)

[s y e]

Haa!

[Mark]

twisted my brain and made me cry 'mama'. Not sure I liked it, but it did affect me, and I kept reading...

[Frieda P]

That's good enough for me, sometimes I don't even like them, thanks Mark.

[Mark]

Yes, I think the worst possible review anyone could give me would either be 'I just couldn't finish it' or ' I struggled to keep reading'. LOL