~Give Me My Wings~

...i run to catch you

          but your essence is fleeting

birds seem to know the answers

           that escape my reasoning

the heart took a rumble

               and the clouds darkened 

skies parted just to glimpse

               a glance of your grace

whilst doves sang hymns

            in light of your plight

i thought the story had ended

          but your flight had just begun

the writing on the wall read,

             'give me my wings, I'm coming home'

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this piece is so beautiful! i often think that the creatures that live around us in the world are far more aware of what is occurring in our world than even we are. maybe we ought to listen to those birds a bit more. your words here are so clandestine and give me the sense of a person's spirit living on long after their life has ended. with your words you give them wings, frieda! they may stay among us forever.

[Frieda P]

Sweet thought Dana, thanks so much.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sad as always when you think of this terrible loss but you turn it into exquisite poetry and we all feel it with you Frieda. The song just crushed me for now!

[Frieda P]

The music had the same effect on me last night, watched The Devil's Own and I was moved by it, this was the result for some reason.

[Frieda P]

I meant thanks John....

[lee von cleef]

Alone so much different from lonely, and home , oh my home, air ramp stairs down to the black tarmac, But home was in the dry Albuquerque air ,there behind the plastic wings, Captains Wings ,pinned on by him, the man in the nose, Yes Alone, small on top , on top of the world, T W A take me Home.

[Frieda P]

Not sure TWA flies there hon, thanks lee...

[B-poet]

This write is definitely in a class of it's own. Wonderfully written, highly uplifting & spiritually inspirational. Great work Frieda. A compelling read. I'm adding this to my library. :)

[Frieda P]

Wow Bpoet, I'm adding your review to mine....thanks muchly! :-)

[Pete Langley]

Beautiful, hun....yes , never stop seeing your beloved in the creases in cloud, the beating of wings, the whisper of wind.... it`s natural and good....and will do you good! P.

[Frieda P]

I'm trying sweet P, some days are easier than other's as you well know. xx

[ShelleyA]

Hi Frieda. What a beautiful write and heartfelt piece. Poignant and touching. Skillfully crafted free verse which I always enjoy and you write it so beautifully. Vivid imagery, good flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and enjambment. Lovely metaphor. Very nice use of personification. Deep expression of emotion; there is poignancy blended with sadness and hope for this special love you lost... your sister, at peace has flown home. Good word choice; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. You're words touched my heart. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

[Frieda P]

Very touching response Shelley, thank you so much.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Frieda. Have a great day!

[Ken Simm.]

As an ornithologist, (honest) I've got to say. Yes to this lovely song. Just Yes!. Its lovely Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Ah my friend, you've gone to the birds, thanks so much, the music moved my soul Ken.

[Ken Simm.]

Tweet tweet. I thought I saw a puddy tat!

[SyberRose]

...i run to catch you
but your essence is fleeting
birds seems to know the answers

Yes the birds and animals always provide a peace before the storm it seems...becomes quiet and peaceful.
an awe inspiring poem of remembrance...hugss

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed it Rose, thanks so much. x

[annie lee]

Your line "...your essence is fleeting..." So poignant. I interpreted this as the poet having to watch a beloved soul winging away to find the peace she could not find here. I hope the poet finds solace in these beautiful words. Masterful as always.

[Frieda P]

I do hope she finally found peace at last minichinz, thanks so much for your kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

I feel the death and escapism in this sad and touching poem. A reference here to your beloved sisiter who is full of love and grace and you want to touch her beautiful essence to unite with her but your wings are fragile ...Almost teared up...:)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Sami, lots of emotions went into this write, so glad you enjoyed it my friend. :-)

[Sami Khalil]

I know . I did...You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

What a good lovely write Frieda, you grab me already in your first three sentences... as it's true, we can't be in the flying world for real, we must have been sometimes there, maybe in the past, or in our afterlife, but what a beautiful thought.... it has just begun... so poignant, so yearning to be there, together... this is touching my dear friend... I get goosebumps of your exquisite quill.... sad so beautiful.... wow.

- Elisa

[Frieda P]

As your review touches me my dear Eli, thanks so much for such an insightful review. x

You're welcome cara.... x